Player Comments on WolfPack

This storygame is linear. It seems that each page either has a right and wrong answer, or contains two choices that lead to the same outcome. In fact, it makes no difference to the storygame which wolf you pick to play as at the start, nor whether you choose to go to the river or the plateau later on, despite this choice apparently being important.

You provide very little explanation of the plot or the setting. When the mysterious wolf reveals that none of your past is real, it has no impact on me as a reader because I have no clue what the past of the protagonist is. It's also unrealistic that you would just blindly believe this wolf instead of asking questions. Why will nobody remember anything but me? If the past is fake, why does it matter if these fake people forget everything if their memories (and they themselves) weren't real to begin with? There's no explanation of how you save the day, only that "you did it!".

I noticed you made at least a little effort with the grammar. Your spelling, capitalisation and punctuation seemed fine, and you used the correct your/you're, however there was the odd mistake (eg. using "had" instead of "have"). Still, the writing was impressive given the ordinary quality of the storygame itself.

You lacked continuity. At one point a link says "go back to the river" regardless of whether or not I have been to the river previously. Another example is what happens to you if you abandon your quest. If you leave before learning about the fate of the world from the mysterious wolf, you'll live a normal life, but if you talk to the mysterious wolf and then run away everyone will lose their memories.

Overall, this storygame was confusing. I can tell you put some effort into this but it was not enjoyable to read. If you work more on writing coherent plots, creating believable characters, and designing interesting settings I'm sure your future storygames will be a lot better, because you have the spelling and grammar side of things down pat.

Well it wasn't bad but to be honest, I was kind of disappointed. I really like games where you play as animals 'cos you get to take a peek at the world from an animal's point of view, but in this game, I really didn't understand why the character was a wolf. Wolves don't have healers or collect herbs and stuff. This story could have been about a person who lived in a tribe that was blocked from the outside world and it would have made a lot more sense. Or it could have just been a story about a regular wolf and that would have been good too, but it feels like you came up with a story about humans and randomly made the main characters wolves instead.

Okay... I'll back away very, very slowly.

Seriously. Randomly clicking moved me through the game even if I... I just don't get it. I'm some random wolf, running from random pack, trusting strange other wolves and saving the day by doing some random stuff.

Can you at least write what did I save the day from?

its ok

Your the thing i was looking for

it good

No offense, but that was just short and boring.

awwwwwwwwooooooooooooooooooo

It was ok i guess

its not the best but its not the worst

Not my favorite game but kind of good.

Add more

It’s not the best

this is the best thing ever!

its not bad but you could meet your mate in this so try to add this please

I love the game it’s way better than Reese's
peanut butter cups

i loved it

I want to be a wolf now

This game is amazing!! Im gonna tell all my friends about this, im sure they'll love it as much as I do. You did a wonderful Job creating this game, maybe you should do a sequel!

Its pretty cool I like how u can go bk (back) into the story when you die I chose winter bc (because) Im a female my self but there was one problem though she was the only female

ehh i thought u would see stuff

It was good, but could be better.

Additional background and detail would've been nice; this game is very barebones. It's also A.D.D. the way that it jumps around. There is no character development I saw, or much in the way of a coherent plot. I don't think enough effort was put into the game to bring it much higher than 2/8.

can you make more amazing games like this one but only? make like a simorlater

stay far away from me

i love history

Wow, fun! You should add pictures to it, I think it would look cooler.

I was so cool and it interesting.

This is better than homework

AMAZING!

This is my first time playing this game and I am enjoying it very much

Hi. This is great but when I clicked the link I really thought that I would be playing with other people not a story. Good effort though.

???? That was the most confusing quiz I've ever took!??

this isnt even a good story!!!

That was kinda boring but it was fun kinda and can you please update this and give some more options and things

Very nice little text game. Dialogue is very well written.

Truly inspirational. now i know to ever give up when my friends and loved ones need me the most.
I must never let them down again.

its a fun chose your own adventure game

it was okay

its so fun because u can make up a story and it keeps me entertained.

It was fun.

its not that inter active and theres no visuals also the game is very short

Its okay but a short game. This game could be online and could have pictures but I liked how I choose the wolf had a fake dark past and he discovered his own past. Good game but I highly suggest to work on some stuff. Hope to see some good updates and I look forward to playing this game again the next time I go on my computer. This game is good that it is based on wolfs but it could use more. Cant wait to see this game next time. :) Thanks for reading my comment and I hope to see good updates soon! Have a great day!

I completed it first try, but the next time, I answered differently, and it was hilarious. you click on the wrong one, YOU DIED!!! seriously loved it.

I thought it was amazing and exciting. I only wish that it went on instead of stopping there.

I like it I didnt know you did this way

bleugh!!....

wow..........
i did the stuff i wouldn't normally

You have made an amazing game i just wish there was more to it

This is a weird game and you can't even play a good game

I like this games so
Much.

its really confusing, i dont understand...

What the hell is this and how has it survived so long past its natural lifespan? Was not expecting to encounter an ancient shambling horror from the site's dark past today. I'd have preferred a Shoggoth to another incomprehensible wolf game by a nine year old tbh.

Amazing!

oof that was strange....

well it shows no picktures

i loveddd this, b ut can u make more options and more parts to the story so that you dont die as quickly....... just asking...

Was not as fun as I thought it to be, but still good. Going to try to look for other wolf games

Really not the best game

It was fun I saved the day!

THIS GAME IS TERRIBLE

An amusing story, if your a preschooler

really confusing

I'm....confused...

I am very confused.

This is way too short. And what did i do to save the day?

Okay.. Wow. I'm gonna have to put this bluntly. No proper storyline, no character development, bad grammer, random sentences that don't complement the storyline, the only good thing is that you made somewhat of an effort -_- Look, I advise you remake this, this had a lot of potential, but you need to improve. A lot.

You know what, I really hate games where you somewhat die immediately after just two pages.

Good story, though quite confusing. I think it deserves nothing below a 5/8.

Cool. I guess

I liked it, though it was kind of confusing. Still, it was nice and short. Keep writing!

What are all of these packs about? Give me details!
Also, what did I save the day from?
WHAT THE HECK IS HAPPENING?????!!!!

Not exactly the best wolf story.
CYS has few wolf story games, and not many get the best ratings, I understand, but this, in my opinion, DESERVES a 2 or 3.
It is short, and very random at times. There were some very minor grammar errors. The plot was hard to follow. I didn't exactly understand what was happening.

It was ok. It felt somewhat like a Warriors fanfic but with wolves instead, although I don't know if that was the intention. It was lacking in detail, both writing and plot wise.

hard to follow, but better than what i have played before.

One comment - What the fudge was happening the whole entire time?

1/8 :-(

I didn't like it. No offense. Somehow I won just by looking at a reflection.

I'm not going to say this sucked and be a fursecutor, but, the idea was a bit shitty, and the execution was very poor. the 2 point differnce between a 1 and the 3 I gave it was the effort you went through to make this.

Good game. Very creative.

short.

Okay,this game was weird,random,confusing,and just icky.
First,how did I save anything?
Second,Why do I randomly become "really hungry,really thirsty,and really tired"??
HUGE plot holes,too linear,no common sense,pretty much a crappy ripoff of WarriorCats,and the ending makes no sense.
Normally,I wouldn't play a terrible game again,just to rate it.But i felt I did it for the community.

Too linear! But interesting concept.

The writing was ok, but I had no idea what was going on the whole time.

Needs more explanation of what's going on. the story is strange, "Come with me or die of old age". Also, the ending makes no sense.

I think that you used a good storytelling technique to bait your audience by not just telling them all the background info right up front...plunging into the action, but there should be some more gradual revealing and depth along the way. Interesting though!

I found this a bit strange and random...

Fatal Flaw: No background info. Without that, this is pretty much as good as random crap.

Why do i get the feeling this is a really short and underdeveloped ripoff of Warrior-Cats?

Otherwise good job but try to be a bit more descriptive.

i gave it a five i feel it has a lot of potential it just needs more detail

Very odd, no idea how anything I did "saved the day".

I love this game. I just hope that it is a bit longer, more descriptive.

This is my first story...

Please comment!

Not sure I got this a decent game but really no back story or story in general and no hints which way I won just by guessing

Awesome! I loved it!