Player Comments on A Tale of War: Thragnazil

A good game as a whole. However many of your options say in the game, do this or die. Guess what if you do that you countinue the story if not you die. Also the surrender scene ends realy fast, almost mid sentance. As far as I can tell there wasn't any spellin error, (but I'm no wizard so I may have missed them.) The story was great and all the detail realy brought this game to life, giving me some thing to realy fight for. The game also tested for morals, as you can slaghter a city of your kin if you so choose, and can end up saving the king or a large number of dwarfs. Again as a whole the game is great, but short and in the end you have a feeling of hopelessness. But you are fighting the army of death so the mood is rather fitting. 6/8 for whole story game 8/8 on your writing, can't wait to read more of your stories so hurry up and puplish them! ;)

just the right diffuculty, with no useless decisions

Shitty. Not even 5 min long and saw every end. All end are bad. Useless

A lot of choices were do or die, but other than that this story looked good.

Pretty okay story. Didn't really keep my interest

It was well written and the take on dwarves was interesting but with a unique story, the surroundings should be also, i felt like I had to make u the world, when I should be living in it. All together however it was fairly good.

I kind of liked the story though it is a bit sad that there is no way of you winning. There should in my opinion be a way to win that siege and at least make you and most civilians survive.
All in all not to bad though. 5/8

Not really liking this.

Is there seriously no way of getting a good ending without a bad outcome at the same time? "
The only 'good' endings mean i end up dead...
You are a hero, however, as the armies of Withros are kept at bay long enough for many to escape through underground tunnels and by ship. You are not one of those who escaped, but dwarves whisper about you while camping out in the forest, hiding from the armies of Withros.
Boras Tol, God of Battle and Father of Dwarves, brings you to Galuund, where you stay at his side for eternity, looked up to by all of Galuund's people."

I enjoyed this, it could have been longer. I'm not sure if there was any way to win this as it seemed most of the endings were bitter sweet. In any case I hope you write more stories in the future.

you cant survive with thragnazil*shaes head* 2\8

it was written very well i just wish it was longer

Unless you're James Kirk there are "no win" scenarios, and that's fine as the journey is sometimes the point. This story has promising mythos and while not the best writing I've ever read shows unpolished skill; however you'll likely never get to enjoy it. The game was full of dead end story tracks and 50/50 shots at death, where the "right answer" leads you a few pages later to certain doom. Again the certain doom isn't the complaint, it's the fact that it happens so often and in such short bursts. There's never time to get a rhythm or invest. At the start this was asking for a 6+, but the more I played and replayed the lower it went. A linear story or even one with inconsequential choices would almost be better in that it would at least allow you to read more than a few pages. I can't condemn it. It has promise and just needs a little more flexibility in my opinion.

Hail the dwarves! We have come to drink mead and kick ass! And we are all out of mead.

My character was meant to die no matter what decision he made during the battle.

I like!

Good story but way to short. 5/8

You die in all of the endings, but it's a good story

It's a good name, a bit short, but I enjoyed it thoroughly.

I will update it over the weekend, maybe. I was originally going to put in two more choices near the beginning (in the place where you decide how to handle the news from Throfakin), but I felt like I was already rushing through the other parts and being kind of lazy, so I ended up leaving it out.

It is well written and has a nice plot with good descriptions. Well done.
You may want to get in choices that make more of a difference in the game as it is quite linear.

This is my second published Storygame. Please enjoy.