Player Comments on Azula and Zuko

SPOILERS AHEAD .....
I really enjoyed this! As a big fan of Avatar: the Last Airbender I think this was a really great interpretation of Azula's story.

She was always my favorite character and I think you really got to the heart of her motivation and why she desired power so much. Juxtaposing the way Ursa treated her to the way Ozai treated her really did a lot to build up the idea that she and Zuko aren't so different, so someone that like Zuko could transfer that affection to her. She's a really great flawed character and this game explores that really well!

The scene where Katara and Zuko put her in the chains was wonderfully executed. I love that we got to see her perspective in feeling out of control and like a monster. That was so important to the scene in the show and you really captured it well.

Perhaps my overall favorite part was the scene in 8 (I think) where the other girls are talking about Ozai not being on the battlefield and Azula's fire is unconsciously summoned. Her statement of 'I should have more control than that' sums up her whole bag really effectively. I will definitely be thinking about that scene later!

I also like that you used "Zuzu" through the whole story to really drive home that in her own way Azula still loves her brother through it all.

Overall I really enjoyed this game! With the show dropping on Netflix I was already planning on rewatching it but now I will have to keep this game in mind when I do! I was not expecting the end to be so abrupt and definitely could have read another hundred words or so.

Never having seen the Avatar series, I felt at first like I was at a loss. However, this story is well written enough that I didn't need that background information. This wasn't a story about the Avatar universe at its core but a story of a sister who cared for her brother above all else.

The transitions between time skips could have been done a little smoother. I understand that each chapter would represent the end of that period, but it made for a slightly more disjointed experience.

It is also notable that the sidekick characters Mai and Ty could have been developed slightly more. Their personalities were touched upon briefly at first and I wonder if some more time could have been spent developing their relationships with both Azula and Zuko. Especially considering Mai ends up engaged to him, it would have been nice to see how their motivations factored in.

There is a lot that is alluded to in the story that doesn't explicitly take place or isn't rightly true. Azula's assertion that she was the only one that could or would get him out of the Fire Nation was strictly false. I could understand if you asserted that this was part of her delusion, but I didn't get delusional out of her. She may have been unhinged and murderous due to various factors, but she always seemed to be able to grasp the facts and point blank, even when others denied them.

It would also have been nice to delve a little more into her relationship with her mother. Because as the player, it's hard to empathize with her point of view. We don't see enough rejection and enough effort from Azula. We don't know if her mother tried and Azula was just too broken to notice or if the mother was genuinely terrible.

Ultimately, the story has a really hard time making me care for Zuko. Half the story Zuko is Azula's rival for motherly affection and we're guided to resent him just for existing. We bully him and undermine him at any chance (without hurting him physically). That relationship pushes Azula into the "do anything to survive" mode. Then when Zuko is condemned to death, we're expected to jive with this sudden sentimentality and desire to save him and protect him? It seems like that flip isn't well transitioned into. The only way I could justify it in the headcanon was out of some sick "Only I can torture my brother." I get the idea was to give Azula nuance and in some ways that succeeded with flying colors. In other ways, it still needed work. Azula needed to be shown as being capable of mercy and sibling love before I could really get behind her showing mercy and love for her brother.

Still great story and damn well done!

I was going to start off by stating how weird (or lazy!) it was to name your links “1,2,3,etc” but then I realized it was the age Azula was in each page. I do think it was rather weird (or lazy!) to suddenly revert to being a one year old without any warning or titling a page to warn the reader. It was very refreshing to play a storygame in third person, although I think that ended up limiting the player in their choices. Instead of putting you as the main character with various paths, you’re taken on a journey through Azula’s childhood.

I really enjoyed playing this because I had invested hours watching Avatar (multiple times too!). I found it deeply entertaining to see events happen in Azula and Zuko’s childhood that molded them into the characters on screen. I get the feeling if I had never watched Avatar, I would be incredibly lost and disinterested in the story, which is sort of a fine line to ride in fan-fic and I’m uncertain where I lie on the issue. The story is obviously directed towards Avatar fans so perhaps there is no need to address someone who hasn’t seen it... why would they click on an Avatar fan-fic if they hadn’t seen the show? If I’m taking this from an absolute literary position, I’d have to rate lower for not including a lore page with explanation on the different nations, state of the world, or bending.

I kind of went back and forth on the realism of Azula’s childhood... shooting fire from fists and murdering birds are obviously universal things for children, but more specifically, if her speech fit her current age. For the most part, the dialogue fit her age. Referring to her mother as “Mommy” and Zuko as “Zuzu” or “Dum-dum” were in line with her age. Azula’s decision-making wasn’t always the best, which matches the thought-process of a child. That was clearly seen in her idea to kill the bird and blame it on Zuko. Some of the inner dialogue seemed a bit too advanced for her age. Specifically on page 2 and 3, Azula seemed to have capabilities way past her age... like fire bending at age two? Can two year olds even walk? No seriously, I don’t know anything about babies.

Some things that stuck out to me:
-Good contrast between Azula’s father and mother. The differences in values between her parents seemed like a big factor in her torn nature aka psycho-killer-bitch syndrome.

-I don’t remember Prince Zuko being a bumbling idiot growing up. I could be wrong, but I remember him being dutiful and caring about the fire nation people. I haven’t seen the show in a while, but wasn’t the reason he got burned because he wanted to protect fire nation lives?

-Favorite part in the entire storygame. Azula to Mai:
“How much do you practice?”
“Whenever I’m bored.”

-“With the utmost precision and flexibility, thanks to lessons from Mai and Ty Lee, she kicked the back of one girl’s head. As she crumples, she kicks the other one as well. You can’t do that in a skirt, Mother”. I’ve never worn a skirt, but I assume it’d be easier to kick someone in the head wearing one. Less resistance, right? Unless you’re wearing a tight, bootylicious Nicki Minaj skirt that is.

I think this was a great fan-fic. The scenes were described well and the characters (except possibly Zuko) were in line with their TV selves. Storygame-wise there weren’t many options, but the high quality of writing and background into the characters overshadowed the lack of “game”.

I forgot that I read this a long long time ago, and never bothered to rate it hehe

Amazing

Sneaking end seems very abrupt.

Really good. You can tell that some thought has gone into this.

Fun

This game allows you to understand a new point of view. Not all monsters are born that way. By exploring the different options you see the effects that One single good decision can change the destiny of more than one person forever. You understand the motivations behind Azula's decision and you see her love for his brother, even if she doesn't demonstrate it in a typical manner. He loved him and that is all.

This was amazing!


10/10 would definitely recommend.

So it starts out as great, but I hate how one sided it is. I'm an azula fan and while shes not the best person, why does Azula only need to change? And it railroads you through canon. If I wanted to play a game that tells the story mostly the same to the show, I'll watch the show

I thoroughly enjoyed this. It's true to the tone of the show, hits all the major beats, and manages to stay faithful to the characters while showing a whole new side to them. I've never felt so much empathy for Azula before. Good job!

Good ending of this is canon. Noone will convince me otherwise especially not some dumb, hateful, victim blaming comics.

It was good

i died

Being a fan of the source material, I feel as if this was a very strong introspective look and interpretation of a very memorable character in Azula. It's quite linear, but I would say that it’s written with a high degree of quality to make up for that.

All in all, this had, and it also kept my interest throughout the entirety of my reading.

I like it

As a big fan of Avatar, I felt like this explored Azula in a way that truly made me see her side of the story for the first time. I always felt that they never really told you much about Azula's background, and this filled the gaps in nicely. Thank you for writing this, I see Azula as a completely different character now!

you wrote way to much plus why not write anything about avatar Aang I mean why prince azula and princess zuko ( yes the "mess up" was intentional ) but I guess azula is allright.

It was amazing

I shamelessly took every pro-Zuko option and my heart is meltiiing

An interesting take on the character! The format had a lot of timeskips and it might have been nice to break up the later years into more content, but I understand why you wouldn't also. It seemed a little linear but it's hard to escape that with fan fiction sometimes.

You managed to take a character I strongly disliked throughout the entire Avatar series (perhaps she becomes more relatable later on - I never finished all of season 3) and make her into someone I could highly sympathize with. I think the characterization you gave to Azula was more in-depth than the characterization the show itself gave to her.

Overall, I thought this was really well-written. I liked how you included some speech mannerisms that were relevant to the age of Azula, and how you reflected her love for her brother above all. I also liked how you captured her perfectionism, drive, and desire for her mother's affection. I was a bit confused by one of the endings, where SPOILER ALERT: Azula's mental age seems to regress to that of a toddler?

One thing I might do to improve is to add a wider diversity of choices, and perhaps a few more endings for the player to reach.

A lot a grammatical errors and misspellings not a very good story-line 4/8

what the heck the ending :((((

I didn’t come to this website looking for this. I had given up finding anything like this, but oh my god that was amazing. As soon as I saw azula and zuko’s names I knew I had to read it and it was amazing. You did a fantastic job writing azula and spelling out her motivation in a believable and easy to empathize with way. Azula is my favorite and I’m so glad you did her justice! We also seem to share a lot of head cannons about her. Anyway, this was amazing! Thank you so much for making it!

I think I'm crying.

I watched AtLA for the first time last summer, and my favorite character was Azula. I saw myself in her perfectionism, her high standards for herself. I felt like a monster too, for agreeing with her. The line "My own mother thought I was a monster. She was right, of course, but it still hurt" resonates with me.

It still hurts to watch her final scene in the show, where she's chained up and crying on the floor. Screaming to the heavens, who do not answer her. Screaming for her mother and brother, screaming because she believes she is unworthy of love.

Azula and Zuko are the same on a fundamental level. They are both desperate for a love that they missed out on: parental love. Azula sought it in her father, and Zuko in his mother. Azula was rewarded for all the wrong things, and when her training was rendered useless, her forging into a weapon just to be thrown away, she had nothing else to live for.

I'm so happy you gave her a small bit of happiness. She deserves it.

I'm just... I have a lot of Azula feels, okay?

This was very well done and I enjoyed it.

Azula was always a character that I loved to hate, but simultaneously felt sympathy for and you captured that perfectly. Good job!

The descriptions are good, the story is exciting and interesting, the dialogue is engaging. I don't have anything to criticize here. Though I would suggest going back through and fixing an issue with your spacing. You have it double spaced between paragraphs, but then dialogue is crammed together without the double spacing and creates a textwall.

Again, I loved this story and you did a fantastic job!

6/8

I have a very ‘vague’ idea about the last airbender. Well, this was a nice heartwarming and touching story about the relationship of siblings in general and I’m sure that any brother/sister would find this very relatable.(Minus the hysterical sister murdering in cold blood.) The character description, depth and immersion in the story was simply superb. I could easily imagine the world around me due to the accurate and beautiful descriptions.

The fighting scenes could use a little bit more description, since from the movie I’ve seen that the last airbender had a unique style; you did explain that part but just briefly. Also in the capture of the earth kingdom and of the police, a lot of more good stuff could’ve been added, like fight descriptions, or a conversation between Azula and the police force head. That just felt like a missed opportunity. Also the scenes between Azula and the last airbemder and his party seemed very brief. But since there was a deadline for the entry, it would be wrong on my part to want so much depth.

The ending was simply marvellous; I could feel the emotions of Azula and Zuko clearly and that was wonderful. I was hoping for a choice to give something like an ultimatum from Azula to Zuko, before they started the final battle, like ,”I did so much for you Zuko. I saved your life twice! I went against my own benefit and saved YOU! ‘Why’ you ask? Because because I love you...and this...this is how you repay me by betraying me? I trusted you Zuko... I..I thought I meant something to you.” It would’ve been interesting to know Zuko’s reaction. Along with a choice of refusing to fight Zuko since he is your brother and you refuse to fight him. But, this is just what I think would’ve been a nice addition.

A few typos mostly at the last few pages and ending links but nothing major or too hindering.

In the end, I loved the story, it succeeded in giving me that vibe of satisfaction you get after finishing a novel with an amazing story and conclusion that leaves your thirst for reading quenched. 7/8.