Player Comments on Custer's Last Stand

***DISCLAIMER*** to the author, It should first be stated, that you should NOT take anything i say with a grain of salt. Everything i say i mean, and i mean it with my chest puffed out, so, take everything i say to heart. To the readers, this review will contain lots of spoilers, so I suggest you read the storygame first.

This story is a great showing in characterisation and high stakes adrenaline fuelled action, deeply rooted in historical fiction. Each page reads like a chapter from an actual novel, with the events unfolding in a manner that feels both substantial and immersive. The author, Will, handles the depiction of Native Americans with a balance of realism and sensitivity, avoiding the pitfalls of romanticism while staying true to the harsh realities of the time.

One of the story's strongest aspects is how well it explains the reasons behind the Native Americans' decisions not to remain in the reservation camps. This choice is based on true events, and the narrative stays commendably accurate in its portrayal of these historical decisions. Major kudos to the author for grounding the story so firmly in reality.

Characters:

The characters, based on real historical figures like Crazy Horse, Wooden Leg, and Sitting Bull, are exceptionally well-written. The author does an excellent job of keeping them true to their historical selves - so much so that it feels like you're meeting these individuals in real life. They are neither overly fictionalized nor reduced to caricatures, which is a rare feat in historical fiction. Another noteworthy point is the historical accuracy in the spiritual practices depicted, such as Sitting Bull offering his pipe. The fact that the American soldiers wore blue coats, as accurately portrayed, adds to the authenticity of the story.

A bit of a sidenote: nothing enrages more than the depiction of scalping defeated enemies. While it’s a dark and unsettling aspect of the narrative, it’s an important inclusion that reflects the brutal reality of the time. It's likely that this practice created more enemies for Native American tribes and fuelled the justification for their subjugation by those who sought to demonize them.

The story doesn't shy away from vivid and unsettling descriptions of mutilations, revenge, and honour killings. As grim as these scenes are, they fit the narrative well because of their historical accuracy. In a piece of historical fiction like this, it’s crucial to avoid embellishment and romanticism to prevent the spread of misconceptions about the events that transpired. The narrative succeeds in painting a picture of complete and utter terror, violence, and chaos. The stakes feel incredibly real, and the threats like "drinking their blood" are adrenaline-fueled and believable, making them all the more chilling.

The last page of the Native American route, where Sitting Bull explains why the war wasn’t a victory despite their acquisition of "the white man's things," is beautifully written. His assessment feels both poignant and historically accurate.

Overall Assessment:

This story is a high-stakes, gritty, and realistic portrayal of a fight for survival. My only areas for potential improvement would be to add more internal monologuing from the main character. Fleshing him out with some doubts, anger, and personal conflict could add depth. At times, he comes across as an unemotional observer, explaining how others feel but giving us little insight into his own emotions. Additionally, introducing a fictional character closely related to the protagonist, a sister, lover, or brother who dies at the hands of the white man—could have heightened the emotional stakes even more. This would make the action scenes feel even more personal and engaging.

Overall, I loved it. I'd rate this story a solid 7/8 for the Native American route.

This is just my review for the Native American route. I’ll dive into the white soldier route later tonight or tomorrow, but for now, consider me thoroughly impressed.

I like how you can play as either a soilder or a native american

Great job with this, I loved it.

Very nice work, as usual of Will very thorough and detailed. Some of his other stories have suffered from a lack of branching (always a difficulty with historical works about specific real life events) but a battle with two sides offers a natural fix for that.

The use of the items to help keep track of who's who was much appreciated too, although it feels like an oversight not to replace the default images.

I enjoyed this a lot, it really is deserving of more attention.

Are you going to make mother one of these like this

I enjoyed this story a lot, loved the contrast between playing both factions, humanizing both sides in the days before the battle and showing the brutality displayed during the conflict.

The descriptions were fantastic, as i read through the story i could see the tide of horsemen cover the plains and the brutal acts being performed by the characters.

I like that you included many opportunities to leave Custer and have a chance to survive on the American Soldier side, and that if you keep insisting on staying with Custer there is no way for you to survive.

There were some issues with fleshing out most of the characters, but this is to be expected with the number of important people involved and the story's size.

Overall, this feels like a love letter to the battle itself, to the point that I'd recommend anyone interested in the time period to give this one a shot! 7/8

Excellent writing. I played the native american's side of the story, and it really made me feel the anxiety of waiting for violence.

Sitting Bull, I thought was an interesting and compelling character. Unfortunately, I feel like the other characters didn't have the opportunity to share their hopes and ambitions as much. I suppose since they are actual historic figures that maybe the author didn't want to have them express thoughts that weren't actually their own. Either way, it felt like there were a lot of characters who didn't have much development.

Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed reading through it.

American Soldier Route Review:

The American soldier route kicks off with a bang, rich in historical detail from the get-go. There’s so much accurate representation packed into the first page alone that I almost felt compelled to list them out:

Historically Accurate Depictions in the Story:

The setting and general context of the 1876 campaign against the Sioux? Spot on.
The three-column strategy to trap the Sioux is executed as it actually was.
Major figures like General Alfred Terry and Colonel George Custer are central to the plot, just as they were in history.
The use of Indian scouts, such as Arikara and Crow, for tracking the Sioux is right on the money.
The inclusion of the Far West steamboat for supplies? Yes, that’s historically accurate too.
The weaponry, the Springfield 1873 carbine, Colt 1873 revolver, Gatling Guns, is all period-appropriate.
Custer’s flamboyant appearance, with his buckskins and short hair, is a great touch of authenticity.
The narrative correctly points out the discovery of gold in the Black Hills as a major trigger for the U.S. government's push to annex the land.
The presence of key figures like Major Reno and Captain Tom Custer (George’s brother), as well as Captain Frederick Benteen with his trademark sarcasm, all add layers of historical accuracy.
The meticulous details about carrying 15 days of rations and extra forage for horses and mules show a deep understanding of military logistics during that era.
Custer’s offhand suggestion about eating horse meat reflects the harsh realities these soldiers faced.
The backstory of Lieutenant Charles DeRudio, the Italian with a history of revolution and exile, is not just a footnote—it’s a testament to the rich tapestry of personalities that filled the ranks. He was a real person, who tried to assassinate Napoleon, as Will told truthfully in the story.


ah heck, there's too many, I give up : p good job will! Crazy good job, insane stuff.

The story does a fantastic job in portraying the key figures like Colonel Custer and General Terry succinctly, descriptively, and with a dash of entertainment. The American side is brimming with personality; it’s almost impossible not to be more engaged with this cast than with the Native American route. The characters here are nuanced, diverse, and distinctive, making them more engaging and entertaining to follow.

The portrayal of the tension and animosity among Custer’s own men is convincingly handled. The arguments presented against Custer’s fitness to lead are realistic, adding another layer of depth to the narrative. The build-up to the actual conflict is immersive, well-paced, and gives a great sense of time and distance. It doesn’t just drop you into the battle; it takes you on the journey, making you feel every step toward the impending fight with the Sioux. In fact, I’d say this aspect is even better done than in the Native American route. The internal pressure, stemming from the brewing turmoil and division within Custer’s ranks, is palpable and adds a significant emotional tension to the story.

Playing both sides of this conflict is nothing short of surreal. It's easy to demonize one side when you're only seeing the conflict from a single perspective. But when you live both sides, when they both become your family, the roots of the conflict become painfully clear. That’s one of the narrative’s greatest strengths: it’s poignant and a masterstroke to allow us to experience the humanity on both sides.

The ending in this route hits even harder than the Native American route. The exploration of not just the dead, like Colonel Custer, but also the psychological effects on survivors, especially Captain Weir’s survivor’s guilt—is vivid and emotionally resonant. It’s a heavy-hearted ending, no doubt.

As for the protagonist, while he does come across as a more emotional observer compared to the Native American protagonist, there’s still a bit of a gap. It would have been even more powerful to hear more about the protagonist’s inner turmoil, his own survivor’s guilt, perhaps, or his thoughts on how he could have influenced events differently. The emotional detachment at key moments, like finding Custer’s mutilated corpse, feels slightly off. We get the gritty details of the scene, sure, but there’s not much in the way of the protagonist’s emotional response, no upheaval, no deep reflection, just a clinical observation of others’ feelings.

Spoiler Alert: But that plot twist with Tom killing Custer? Absolutely brilliant. A lot of players who don’t explore all the routes might miss it, but it’s a nice touch, for sure. When you choose to make the last stand with Custer, the emotions among the cast - tears in Tom’s eyes, the palpable sense of impending death - are powerful. Yet again, though, the protagonist seems emotionally distant. We feel the physical pain of being pummelled, but there’s no inner monologue about the life he’s leaving behind, no sense of dread, no emotional crescendo.

In terms of action scenes, id say the native American route was surprisingly a bit more 'action' focused, presumably because they were the side actually winning and doing most of the mutilating.

That’s my take on the American soldier route. It’s a gripping, historically rich, and emotionally complex narrative, but with just a bit more focus on the protagonist’s inner world, it could have been even more impactful. I liked it as much, or maybe a little bit more than the native American route, but due to the lack of emotional depth to the protagonists I cant quite give it an 8, id consider the story an 8 on all other metrics though.

Overall verdict: 7/8

Omg I loved it u can play an Indian or soldier it is Awsesome

sparked a discussion about general custer rule 34 on the discord