Player Comments on Digitallure

An adventure that tries to combine CYOA and philosophy.. By putting insta-deathlinks.. And Rickroll.

The concept is prety neat, you live in a dystopian-esqe world, where you are a rich snob that get butcherd to death by a anti-technologic revolution... If you stay and eat breakfast. If you go outside and follow the crowd, you join the revolution. Go against the crowd, World War 3 happens, ignore the crowd, save a suicidal Woobie and get reprimanded because you didn't attend a meeting. Go check on a memo, GET RICKROLLED. This, is the most annoying thing for me when reading this adventure, consistency between games are non-existent. As if the fate of the world depends on whether you eat breakfast or not.

Consistency issues aside, most of the comments seems to zone in on the blank space between sentences. Whilst it is pretty neat as the story doesn't need a wall of text to explain everything, the length and the bland white of the background makes it a real eye-sore. I recommend making the length between sentences shorter so us PC uses wouldn't have to scroll so far to read one sentence.

4/10

Interesting. Hypocrisy strives for evocative, and attains it (to some degree). I think the negative response might be as a result of a lack of action. People don't like to play a game and be confronted with uncomfortable truths. Perhaps a little bit more development of the ideas, and more discerning word choice could have made the message have a greater impact. The themes are good but the narrative is weak.
Minor note: I don't think "infinitesimal" means what you think it means.
Cheers, Hypocrisy

What on earth were all those giant spaces between every line? There was some content here, but it was really irritating to have to scroll through countless lines of blank space just to get to the next line.

Way too short. It's a story, not a game really. One page and I died. Grrrr...

That was terrible. I died a horrific death after one choice.

...interesting?

My apologies to those who encountered the horrendous blank expanses between the text and uh, "terrible execution"?

In all honesty, this was a University project done in about 4 hours so I apologize for the lack of polish.

I greatly appreciate all the feedback, being [positively] surprised by the sense of community present on this website.

Comments/criticism will be taken wholeheartedly if I ever decide to take a break and sit down to make something... better.

Thanks!

This is crap. From the description I thought it could go somewhere, but the execution is terrible.

This game isn't so much of a game as rather some kind of moral lesson, which I don't get. And what's up with the huge spaces? Seems unnecessary to me.

NO NO NO NO NO YOU DID NOT JUST RICKROLL ME

The giant spacings were very irritating.

Apearntly I'm scorpion, and got killed just about every page

Did not like the giant spacing between lines which broke up the readability of the story. Seem an interesting concept though.

3/8 isn't fair. This seemed to be well-thought out and deep, but it wasn't much of a story and it was very easy to die. The huge spaces were really fucking annoying though.

I just go Rick Rolled

no basckstory to this game how did the world become like this without backstory this is not much to this game

I am afraid I don't like it. I hate the gaps between most of your sentences, I know this creates suspense but it shouldn't be done for every sentence. Try and take some time writing off site for less harsh reviews.
2/8.

HCFAPRICOT LIKES THIS VERY MUCH ;D

An interesting story; my only complaint is that there is a strange amount of space between sentences, that seems to be compensating for the game's short length.

Woah. That was really... deep. It got me really thinking.

I liked this one.

This story was fairly interesting, with decent writing and grammar. The only issue I had involved the extremely large spaces between each sentence or group of sentences. It felt slightly annoying, but otherwise, I thought it was a good read for its length (especially with its quote at the end).

Oh geez, forgot to log in.

Anyways, that was a nice story. I liked the writing, and the concept. It really has me thinking of our future now. And that death scene... whoa.

This was a great game (at least I liked it). You must have been reading lots of Ray Bradburry or someth'n, cuz it feels like it. The quotes where nice too. You obviously thought this out. Good job!