Player Comments on Don't Forget

I... I don't get. I just don't get it. It seems like the ending was rushed. Is there going to be a sequel or something to explain what's going on? I just... I don't get it.

A few things surprised me in the story.

With all of the people contributing to this story, I was thinking it would be a scrambled mess of a story and I was right. It went from talking about rocks to soggy waffles, which was a little confusing. Though I did enjoy the story, it felt a little rushed in the en, like you couldn't think of a good way to end it, so you made some confusing ending that had nothing to do with the original story.

The one thing I didn't expect was spelling/grammar mistakes. There were quite a few, which I thought was weird, but they didn't hurt the story much.

Overall, the story was nice, but felt a little like it was stolen or something, but it was still worth every cent.

Nooooooooooooooo is that it?

This was very similar to another story I read on here. Otherwise it was interesting though linear. quite a few typos further in the story almost as if it was being rushed to finish. Still not sure what I just read, but that's not necessarily a bad thing here.

I cannot believe you crushed my... My... I can't describe this... In my ending... No... I wont spoil... Play it to find out how much you will be.

It was ok but there was some spelling mistakes

I like snowcones.

P.S needs more choices.

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it's like a s-snow clone but with magic

Seems a bit too similar to Snow...but it's okay.

Pumpkin head with a suit and tie? Hmm, sounds familiar.

Some very good writing here and so I'd definitely encourage you to finish it, but here's the thing: you're not supposed to publish unfinished work here, and nobody likes to see the "I'll continue only if people like it!" sort of demands for back patting.

You can always use the Writer's Workshop if you need feedback, the point of the Sneak Peek seeing is so that you can share a link without actually hitting publish.

And just fyi now that you HAVE put this up, once it's taken down again you're going to have to copy and paste it all over to a fresh version, because otherwise it won't show up on the new storygames page when you do finally finish. You've marked it with today as the publication date now.