Player Comments on Happy(TM)

Nice little story, wish it was longer. You could have made it like Joy from We Happy Few, except permanent, that's kinda what I was expecting.

For its short length, this story really felt complete. It had a good plot and the poem at the beginning really set the mood for the whole story. You also somehow managed to have a character arc possible and a decent amount of branching in less than 2000 words. That's pretty incredible.

A little mistake full but very good. I liked the poetry at the beginning.

A short story filled with good moments with every page having something to substantial to offer.
I really like how Mike was written with his possibility of a dynamic Character arc based on choice but also his inescapable staple Blood lust haunting or "helping" him.
Its a really small thing but it Have such a soft spot for it, I love the clever acronyms S.A.D and T.E.A.R.s really scratch that funny itch.

During my first read, all I had on my mind was how a story with this much stuff had less than 2000 words. Honestly, I was baffled. You had the happy™ killings, the big choice, the groups, and the endings. It all felt really complete and tied together in one solid storygame. You used the first choice as a clever disguise, while it did branch back to the same point, I didn’t feel cheated because of it. It added enough on its own to add to the story, while also making it seem bigger.

Now I could cry about the fact serial killers, who are mostly anti-social, form groups in this world, but I won’t. It added to the atmosphere of your world, where you either kill happily or are happy™ and killed. That’s also the tone of this story, like an old Tom and Jerry cartoon, it displays violence in a humorful manner while adding just enough seriousness in it to make it all work.

The one thing I do want to add, is that the breaks between the lines (in the poem that sounded more like an upbeat corporate theme song) and paragraphs were big, probably due to usage of the advanced text editor.

I loved everything except the Poem at beginning. I loved the way you described Mike and the TEARS. Really a great Job! I am jealous of your work!

Before anybody complains this is too short, just pointing out it was written for the Tiny 'Topia challenge with a limit of 2000 words. (http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/creative-corner/message/26405)

I don't necessarily think anyone will complain though, because despite the brevity this doesn't feel incomplete at all. Just like a short and goofy (and very Endmaster-ish) idea you ran with, and I love it.

The whole thing was hilarious. Having to dump the Happy family one by one out on your lawn was the part that had me laughing the hardest.

Very nice and uplifting poem kicking this off with too, really sets the mood for our hero and his plight.