Player Comments on Just follow the dragon

Okay, this story is just bad. The premise is bad, the grammar is bad, the spelling is bad, and the endings are bad. The singular redeeming part of this storygame is that it actually has multiple (albeit criminally short) paths available, although only one ends in a win. The game seems designed to shock and offend, but does so nowhere near as elegantly as EndMaster. 1/8

I'm not happy that I won this f****** game.

-- Penworth on 8/9/2015 9:23:48 AM

Agreed.

I'm not happy that I won this f****** game.

A little proofreading can go a long way. When you read your own story, you know what words are supposed to be there, because you wrote them. If you have someone else read it for you, they can often point out errors that you cannot even see. This particular story could certainly benefit from a little extra proofreading.

I'm just floating a guess that you have no experience of drugs and have never met anyone who has but may have seen a film once referencing drugs :D.

I'm a little baffled by lines like "your friend tackles a pitbull". Why does he tackle a pitbull? Is this a normal activity among friends? Are we talking about Pitbull the dog or Pitbull the singer, who may well benefit from a few crash-tackles from irate fans.

The aim of this game is solely to get high, see a dragon and follow it which is a rather tedious thing to do I imagine out of all the possibilities available among a group of stoned teenagers and the choices were randomly bizarre rather than randomly funny (randomness btw is rarely funny). This comment took longer to write than the story took to read which is never a good sign.