Player Comments on Mission X-17

Oh damn. This was kinda suprising, honestly.

The first few pages were a bit dull in my opinion, and it lacked a good hook to pull me into the storygame. However, as I read on, I began to enjoy myself and have fun playing it.

There was branching here, but it might have been nice if there were more endings then death and the two at the end that are decided by the last choice.

I liked the plot development, and I think there seemed to be a rise in quality from the first part of the story to the end. Balance it out more please, because some parts felt well fleshed out while others felt rather... lazy, and not descriptive.

I'll be honest, I did see a few spelling errors, but they weren't made often and could be fixed easily with some proofreading.

Character development and setting was rather average, but hey, something is better then nothing I suppose.

4/8, I liked it but it needs work.

This wasn't bad, actually. It started off mediocre and developed in a quite a few directions. There weren't too many dead ends, at least not enough to become irritating, and despite the lack of concise descriptions there was at least one satisfactory ending.

On the other hand, I feel the need to inform you that punching a pane of glass repeatedly does not cause your bones and cartilage to launch themselves out of your hand. That was just weird. If you wanted to make that into a realistic suicide ending, just say that the player cut their wrist on the sharp glass or something, instead of this flying bone stuff.

I got the good ending. Anyway, I loved the writing in this story. There were plenty of choices, and the story actually interested me. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, so that's a plus. One thing I did notice, however, is that if you gointo the cave and try to go into the upper tunnel, it's just an empty page with no links.
I suggest you just fix that. Otherwise, this story is great in my opinion. 5/8. :)

Death by starvation!

There is only one legitimate path on which you don't instantly die. I like a story which can branch off; this really didn't offer me much choice...

Not bad. It would be better if you can add more details.

I really liked this!

That was a pretty good story, I'd say. What I didn't like was some of the deaths which come out of nowhere with no warning. Those could've been thought out much better. However, the good ending was pretty good thought it didn't answer any questions about what I was doing here.

Also I would never have tears coming out of my eyes because I'm a manly man.

I liked this, and the good ending

This is amazing!

Has a good concept. I just wish it could be longer.

This game was amazingly written, tons of fun, and all in all I gave this game 7/8. Fantastic job mariofanalex

It could've used some polishing, but I honestly think this is pretty impressive for a first story. Good job.

Wait, that was the BAD End?

Ehh, I'm gonna leave that one open to interpretation. Personally, I'm rather selfish, sooo... yeah.