Player Comments on Rose

This is sweet, touching, and heart-warming...but it's not a storygame. It's just a short story awkwardly placed in first person. I can't truly care for this that is just thrown in my face even despite the fact the whole story is about her. Your grammar needs some work as well; proper punctuation, capitalization, and spelling can make a story that much better.

Just like your first story, you are lacking any choices. In fact, this one doesn't have any choices. Also, it's too short. I give you a C+ for effort. 2/8

I did lose my interest after some minutes after just clicking because the game didn't really captivate me that much.

its short but great! But it doesn't really have a plot to it

That font was something though. I actually wanted to read more but, it was short.

very short and nice but, I wish there was more to it.

Seems to me like you tried too hard to make something 'moving'. It was short, not well written, and rather generic, except for the fact that she was alive at the end. Seems like most people like to kill off lovers in these.
Anyways, don't try to write something that'll pump people up on emotional adrenaline. In my mind, that's always a side-effect of good writing and a good, well developed, clear plot. Just write normally, have fun with it.

Well it was well crafted but too short and you used I in the lower case when it should always be upper case but good use of the pictures :)

P-O-O-P what does that spell? Poop. Just like this game.

It was kind of dull. Basically you just listed out her good qualities, and then happy ever after. The grammar wasn't terrible, but there were still some mistakes. I noticed that, throughout the story, you used 'i' instead of 'I'. A simple proofread would have corrected that.

3/8.

It was sweet and well written, it almost reminded me of Snow. The pictures were....enticing....nothing wrong with that I guess xD The only flaw is the choices, there are none and although it is very well written, I have no hold in what happens.

I don't get it.

It's just... very weird. Short, yes, and generally there's nothing wrong with short games. But this had two things I thought weren't helping; it's obviously very linear, so the paths before us are obvious. However, it still didn't grab me enough to actually care about what was going on. The images didn't seem to fit in, either.

Well the story was kind of cute, but... "She was lovable, caring and respectful. *Insert picture of 12 year old wearing lingerie, trying to look seductive.*" ... Yes, clearly the main character was attracted to the girl's wonderful personality :p

I liked that you could actually feel what the author was feeling because of the way that the words were placed, you should keep writing because this story almost made me cry which is a good sign because the feelings that the persona feels are being transferred to the reader but it was too short so take your time writing future stories.

It was terrible yes, but it seemed like the creator kind of tried...

*Game has a whopping zero choices*
*makes finger quotations* "every path"

In all seriousness, this isn't a BAD attempt at a game, but...it's not a game. It's a story. A very cliché, vague, cloying story. This story just looks like a fluffy one-shot cut up into little chunks.

Just a small, simple poetic story. But sadly the story wasn't long enough so I even finished this game before able to use the tissue :(