Player Comments on Star Wars: A Padawan's Journey part 8: War

It’s so sad please. Continue i am crying over here :(

This was a pretty good game to say the least.It also seems no accessible unless you use a secret method.With is kinda cool

The story was good sometimes a bit confusing, with all the different character shifts but over all a good story

Not well written

Left me with wanting more

Towards the end I held onto every word if I did not know that was the end I would have hated it, but since I know there is another one coming that was great.

Again, another good story, but until we have more choices you cannot climb higher than a 6/8. There needs to be a way to save everyone, or to lose everyone (as it shows), or to only lose certain people. The only time to get to choose what to do is when you are fighting or exploring, and those usually end up having only one way to go. This isn't a choose-your-own-adventure, this is a story

For all who read, this is NOT the last episode, he says so on his page. He said he was only half way done so there's gonna be like 14 chapters or something

Got an idea, I have! You know that stare that a sith can use that makes u imagine your death? Well maybe Pauk really is the traitor and used it on you when you saw him. Although shin died Kreia and Samdul didn't and maybe something happens like this...

You re-awaken from a day dream from a sudden splash to the face. Now awake you look around you.

"Didn't I just die?" you think to yourself, unfazed by the giant amounts of water that hit you along the face.

A groaning gets your attention and you turn to see Samdul and Kreia laying on their backs besides an escape pod.

"Where am I?" you ask yourself. You look around you and see trees as far as the eye can see. You move over to Kreia and Samdul and quickly glimpse to where you remembered Pauk and the masked man appear."Was I dreaming?" you continue to question your self while you stagger towards the escape pod.

"Kreia! Samdul!" you shouted at their seemingly unconscious bodys. Although you sense they are still with you, you fear that they may have sustained some major injuries.

"*coughs* well that could have gone better..." you hear in that all too familiar voice. Samdul sits himself up and rushes to your side. Well you assume it was a rush but you knew how hard you'd all fallen so it wasn't surprising to see him so ridged.

"You okay?" you say bluntly.

"No I am not okay" he says in a matter of fact tone."if you're talking physically wise I appear to be okay, I'm just a bit shaken up..."

You approach the man and you both support each others weights. You turn the both of you around and extend a finger but Samdul is already moving his legs.

"Kreia!" you both shout in unison as you head to her unconscious body. It seems to take a life time to reach her, although you are only a few meters away. You both drop to the ground and check her wounds...It appears Kreia has taken the blunt of the fall...

Although you had a feeling she was alive, the injuries she sustained has put her in a crippled state... Her left leg appeared broken and at the very least was dis jointed, she had many cuts and scrapes bleeding all over and her injured rib cut she had gotten when fighting (insert his name here, I can't remember) was now at least twice it's size and bleeding insanely.

You think back to the first time you met, you didn't know her name and she was strong. Now if you don't find medicine or at least medical plants your friend will face death...for real this time...Then you get an idea.

"Kreia! Kreia can you hear me?!" Says Samdul, the Tone in his voice is concerned and you can tell he also feels her presence.

You have an idea, although you are unsure of its outcome you decide that it's worth a try. You hover your hands just above Kreia's chest. A look of confusion crosses Samdul's face.

"What ARE you doing?" he adds extra emphasis to the ARE part.

"Trying something"

"What are you trying?" his questioning is irritating you.

"Look I've been practicing a healing technique behind my masters back, okay? I need to concentrate so please shoosh." You know that you don't have a lot of energy left and this technique is draining to say the least. You go over the summary you wrote up in one of your vlogs. The "Force healing" as you called it required a slow transmission of the force from one persons body to another, healing it in the process. But it can also be used like a defibrillator, once enough energy is transmitted the transmitter quickly adds a jolt of energy to shock the person and jump start their body. You might have to attempt your second technique .You haven't had any practice on a person yet and haven't even fully thought the second use through but it was worth a shot.

As if he read your thoughts Samdul turns to you and puts his hands above yours and starts to give you his force energy. You can feel it building up in you and the power is almost overwhelming, you never knew Samdul had such a reserve of energy, you kept on transmitting your new acquired energy from your body to Kreia and you can already see some of the cuts and bruises fading and the bleeding from all around her body is stopping slowly and although she is looking much better it still looks like her body needs a jumpstar and without even thinking you start pumping as much energy as you can into her body and with the final energies in your body you shock her body...

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Really, really awesome but I got so into the story that I'm on the verge of crying...And I'm not one that gets sulky a lot so well done. Kinda ended on a cliff hanger though. Doesn't tell you about the war or anything. You should continue this. I don't know how but I feel the MC needs to live and settle things right. This padawan has gotten so far but for what? I think it needs to carry on so please somehow do it...

I loved the story from the very beginning but I really hope this isn't he real ending I want it to be another dream like state at the end like he had during the beginning where he killed everyone on the ship or if not that at the very least he survives through the wounds. And if it was like a dream an everyone survived since someone wanted romance and how story goes can see him with kreia or he finds X2 since u know She is alive atleast other then the ending I loved the entire story just really hated ending especially since it looks like u r working on another one and don't want a new character for it

Haha, I loved this game, it's one of the best I've played so far and...I kinda actually wanted to have an option to romance someone! Haha. :)

Oh that was good.I hope in the next part main hero will embrace "the dark side" and will have his revenge becouse of all circumstances in final.

I both hate and love the creator of this game. It was done brilliantly, the way the charecters emotions were portrayed. Excellent and disappointing ending. I was hoping that there would be some kind of 'thing' between you and kreia, ad that you would live. But life doesn't plan out the way you want it to. Much like this game. This was a fantastic game once again, and I hope to see this author write again soon.

Good work, as always.

Continuing my last comment.I am not really looking forward to the next part anymore even add if you add a new main character since the I feel connected to the old one.Gave a 6 as an individual story.

Honestly I'm angry.I really am.Killing of the main character's friends I can understand but why the main character himself.I thought we were going to have to choose between helping the sith or jedi.We also couldn't do anything about the main character's attitude.Even the fighting is not a lot.The strongest person I fought was Sibar and he was pretty easy.But mostly,I'm angry at the fact that you killed of the main character.He's the person you mainly control and you just killed him off.It was way more fun play to play as him than x2 or kreia since the reader feels a bit connected to him.Also, we couldn't even do anything at the final fight with lots of things still unknown to the reader.

i have to say, i've been following the story and it seems like a horrible decision to kill off most of the characters now.
While I could understand shin and MAYBE the other padawan, you still haven't explained why anyone wanted shin dead in the firs place, Samdul shouldn't have been killed (there was literally no reason for him to die whatsoever) and there should have been an option to stay with X2 instead of going with your jedi friends (although at least we know she's alive now).

Other than the disastrous ending I find that your story was well written, you may make the jedi and sith look, as Darthnelly stated earlier on, like angry, irrationnal teenagers, but that can be accepted seeing as this is fanfiction.

You have a great plot, and your story quality is FAR better than most storygames on this site, not to mention the fact that you actually seem to make an effort to make your story better each time. (and it shows, it really does).

Your grammar is more or less flawless, which we are all thankful for, and while some eople may complain about the story being too "linear", I feel as if all series storygames should be linear. (although once you reach the very last episode I strongly suggest different possible endings).

All in all, good job, 7/8

Does everyone really have to DIE? I am really disappointed by the end!

Wasn't much worth the wait but it seems like it was more of a filler to get to the action in the next story. And of course ill be waiting for as long as I need to for it, always at the edge of my seat.

This is a great story I loved it =D

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EPIC.But the ending made me sad.Looking forward to the next part :D

Great series, i hope you decide to continue them as im eager to find out how it all REALLY ends.

Brilliant like the rest. Please carry on with the series

Sad ending, but it was very good. I hope that he recovers from his losses and defeats both the Jedi and Sith.

just...dam. great story jmg, i wait with bated breath for the next one.

Why?! You got us all killed! Does that mean the story is over?! I need to know if I live!

um...is there a new series of this?

Very very good. The writing, the story and the length. Keep writing awesome stories like like this series and the Blackwood Chronicles!

I love this series make more and all that mushy stuff. But dude seriously make a ton more...

Incredible that you are already 8 into these stories. They keep getting better and better =)

The ending...by God that ending! I can barely contain my excitement for the next installment of this series. Definitely the best one!

Part 9. Need Part 9.
The Best Star Wars Fanfic in the world.
The cliffhanger was so intense. I wonder what happened to my character.
Can't wait for Part 9 to be started.

I'm speechless.

Loving this series, they just keep getting better.

nice story i cant wait to find out what happen's next keep up the good work

Holy crap. I never really thought this is what I was going to get when I thought of war in this series, but I'm glad I got it. Very intense. Great chapter, the best so far. Minimum grammar issues (if any), the action scenes were very good, and the story was...
Well, you'll find out for yourself.
BTW, in the canon series, lightsabers don't leave blood (something to do with plasma or something), but since this is a fan-fic, I suppose I can let that slide. It adds to the experience, so I'm fine with it.

By far the absolute best in the series. Keep bringing them.