Player Comments on Supernatural (TV) Fanfic

Please put some more effort into your game.

Is there even a hundred words in this entire 'story'?

did anybody notice that the author commented, "so awesome"?
something seems wrong with that.

Umm, maybe you should actually put forth more effort next time.

I'm sorry, but this was bad.
You need an actual plot and you need details.
What was the monster? Why was the monster chasing someone? Was it hungry? Did it need the person for some ritual?
How did Dean and Sam find out about the monster?
Why did the Hunter want to kill the monster for vengeance?
What does the monster look like? The person they were chasing?
Etc.

You can't make a good story with just a few lines of dialogue and boring writing with barely-if any descriptions.

Please unpublish and try again.

Please read the guidelines in the Help & Info on how to make a story. This had no real plot.

Not a story. Sam and Dean would be embarrassed to know this exists, it doesn't even seem to written by a fan. It's very bad form to comment on your own game. If you want to be taken serious as a writer don't be to proud to ask for help. Finally be prepared for this to be deleted unless you unpublish it and work on making it better.

Well... this is a subject for deletion for various reasons. I'll let the others to provide the things you need to know.

Next time, make a real story :)

so awsome