Player Comments on The story of Shadow the hedgehog as a wolf

You broke the fourth wall. That's all I guess.

no.

@Shadow_Strider
Even that isn't as easy as it should be, because as far as I can tell there's only one end game link and quite a few dead end pages!

There isn't even an end game link anywhere if you choose bite on the first page.

This is shit. The only upside is that you get a point for playing it.

*Sigh* the only thing okay about this "game" is the easy point i get for "reading" it...

If it was just practice why would you post it?

I'm done even attempting to be nice about things like this. It is shit. You know it's shit. You didn't even make the slightest attempt to produce anything that WASN'T shit. This isn't me being mean, this is me having enough respect for you to assume you're capable of basic cognizant function.

I mean you and the others like you obviously wouldn't join a site like this and then not even take the time to read a single other story or article, or have a look at the forums before slamming your fists down on your keyboard a few times and hitting 'publish', right? That's preposterous, to even imagine someone with human level intelligence failing at something so basic.

And no one who cares enough about writing to join a site dedicated to it would publish a story unless it was something they proofread and put effort to and could stand by and be proud of, surely?

So what is happening here is you and the others are deliberately trolling. Obviously. And it was very cute, but not so much anymore, so please stop now. :)

Guys sorry you say it's "shit" but really it was just a practice and I'm making a better story called "the spirit wolves" and it's WAYYYYYYYYYYYYY better and I chose to do shadow as s wolf because in real life I'm making a real good comic about it and I think next I will put multiple stories in a list and see which one you guys wanna do so don't give up on me this one will be better PROMISE!!!!! And I will probably edit Shadow as a wolf

Your storygame is going to be unpublished for having dead end links. When you edit and re-publish this or create a new storygame, make sure you try to at least meet the minimum site standards, which can be seen here:
http://chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/article.aspx?ArticleId=38

I admit I have a certain morbid fascination in wondering how the mind of someone who would take a shit on their computer, fondly regard the steaming pile, then go 'yes, the world needs to see this' even works...

I... I don't... I can't... The story is that Shadow the hedgehog is a wolf... What a weird fetish to have, but whatever makes you happy. O.O

I'm sorry for those of you who didn't like it it was my first try

If it wasn't for the fact that this is going to get deleted, I may very well be legitimately pissed off about this. Garbage like this that had absolutely zero effort put into only serves to clutter the New StoryGame section and pushes new stories that had actual effort put into them down into the abyss before they can gain ample recognition. But because this is going to be rated a one, has blank pages and dead links, it's going to go the way of the dinosaurs, so all will be righted in the end.

You have a lot of pages with no links on them. That, in and of itself, is grounds for a story's deletion. However, that is far from the game's only problem. There are misspellings and grammatical errors galore. Each page is, at most, two sentences long. Description is scarce.

It is also worth mentioning that, aside from the characters' names, there is nothing to suggest that this is, in any way tied to the universe of Sonic the Hedgehog. If you are going to insist that it is, though, you should probably change the category to "fan-fiction".

If you're saying it's not finished why didn't you unpublish it and advertise on the link on the forum?
oh and it's obvious you didn't think of a plan. And why would your mother kill you if you're her only pup alive?
what kind of revenge did you do to Scourge that resulted killing him?
why the heck your mother killed you when you just scratched Scourge?
what the heck is your mother's name?
why is this even rushed?
why would the maturity rating be 7/8 when you just scratched Scourge?
why no plot?
why would your mother hate you when you just pushed Scourge away?