Player Comments on Will You Rat Them Out?

Actually kinda cool. got a good ending. kinda boring tjo :(

This could be an interesting premise, particularly if the options were various ways to try to avoid telling the truth. The way it is now, there isn't really a curse, just a question on if you will be fully open and honest or not.

There are several obvious mistyped words - "as" for "is", etc., but general grammar is ok. Several pages would benefit from line breaks. Are you mother and sister both named Kace? The world may never know. It is also never made clear what your mother was supposed to have done that makes Kace and potentially yourself want to runaway in the first place.

I got the good ending, and even here it isn't made clear why your mother was so bad other than she doesn't care if your aunt and uncle adopt you. It is a little weird that there is a specific Good ending, but most of the other endings don't have a specific title.

Good on you for publishing something that has decent branching and variable endings. I think that a reworking of the central premise could be very interesting, and would certain reread it, if that was done.

I felt really connected to this story, especially since my name is the same, and I didn't rat anyone out!

......I have no words.......................................

blech

I thought I had to tell the truth no matter what? Why am I given the option of not doing so? Plus, if I was 'cursed from birth' to tell the truth, why would my sister confide in me that she was running away? Surely it must've come up at some point.

I enjoyed this one, I found the bad ending first and then the best one before finding every single ending. Pretty short and strange, but it was pretty well written.

The game tells me I'm forced to tell the truth - yet I do it like it's nothing. The premise is cool, I guess, but it doesn't actually happen, and there's so little to reflect on that I read this in five minutes and my eyes were still glassy at the end.

It’s 1am, I’ve never done one of these, I enjoyed it significantly more than I thought I would. 8/10 would try to get another ending immediately after writing this.

Pretty good, although short. I can tell this was made by a younger kid. Keep up the good work!

So basically, I’m a gossip? Well, that’s not a curse, that’s my life :D The intro sentence is a bit inelegant and your sentences would benefit from being in paragraphs. Happily, I seem to have memorized the Detroit subway timetable and having run away from mum I’m happy to run away from my sister too (why on earth doesn’t she just get in the taxi with me?). The ending was a bit weird and sudden and the phrase “Now you’re in big doodle” is not one I would have chosen to end the story on.

This story has promise. The premise is interesting, if a bit casual (we’re basically abandoning our mother because “she’s not enough for us”?) and there was some good branching here. There were plenty of grammar errors though and your sentences would be better in paragraphs but it’s a promising start and the kind of story I’d like to see developed further. I’ll give this a 4/8 because it did entertain me for 5 minutes but on the whole it’s too short and should be worked on a bit more. Good start though 😊

Hey, congrats on publishing your first story!

I think you're really good at writing dialogue, but you might want to take a look at some more stories before publishing.

I think the idea of a curse where you're compelled to snitch on people is quite compelling actually. In fact, the premise sort of reminds me of Ella Enchanted, and that was a really fun movie.

But you end it too soon. So from what I can tell, you wake up, either resist the compulsion to tattle and run away with your sister Kacy, or you tattle on her.

The tattling path ends prematurely, with your mom mysteriously falling out of a window. I feel like you have to give it some build up, and actually write a few more events leading up to the conclusion.

And that's the major issue. Things sort of happen, but I would definetly like to see a more gradual progression.

Overall, not bad and it's commendable that you published for your first time, but you can do better.