Team 2 should be Grill Night and the Newbie

Personally, I just finished the Da Vinci Code. If you don't mind a 500 page fanfiction of Indiana Jones and Dan Brown's unfiltered thoughts on theology, it's very enjoyable. The puzzles and twists are interesting, but if you're super into the 'CHRISTIANS AND CATHOLICS NEVER DO A SINGLE THING WRONG' mindset, I wouldn't recommend. 

Reviews: 4 (Yay!)

Featured: 1 (Double yay!)

Team #2

Games Reviewed:

• Temple Of Spades
• Locked Out (The Movie)
• Locked Out (The Movie) Episode Two
• Locked Out (The Movie) Episode Three (The finale of the Locked Out saga. Reviews of longer storygames to come.

Alright, I like reviewing. I'll toss my hat in the ring!

Does sound pretty deadphobic to me.

Vastest apologies. It does seem a bit strange, now that you mention it, though.

Story A:

Plot twist! It was a bag of ashes and a dagger! This story vaguely reminds me of something I've read, but I can't quite place it. Not that that's a bad thing, in fact, I think it adds to the dystopian feeling of the story even more. Now, I quite like this review format, so I'm going to continue with it.

The Good:

The pacing, SPAG, and world building were all just as expected from incredible writers like MHD and Sent. The backstory was believable and quite interesting, and the concept of a 'dead land' is fascinating to me. I wonder what it means in this context.

The Meh:

Of course, there's only so much characterization you can do in these many words. Sticking to being in one character's mind may have helped a bit more.

The Bad:

It got confusing at parts. With all the character switching, I couldn't really tell what was going on until halfway through the story. Also, more importantly, the cliffhanger! Why oh why... I suddenly need to know more and now I'll never get my answers. If Sethra is dead I'm going to cry! What happens to Larthi? All essential questions. The admin who wrote this better release the story. Please.

Personal Insight:

I really liked this one. On the traditional rating scale for the site I'd give it a solid 6/8.

Story B:

This went for a shotgun shell to the Pathos of the reader, I see. The admins are being cruel with us today.

The Good:

Once again, world building, plot, pacing, SPAG, the works. All near-perfect. The story of this one was more compelling, reminding me of movies about Alien parasites during the Red Scare. (If you aren't from the USA or Russia, the Red Scare was a period of time where the US got very paranoid about communism. Movies of the time reflected it, and many were about hostile beings from outer space, such as 'The Thing.') This story also does an excellent job of focusing on one idea of the main character, yet giving new information. The characterization of both characters was incredible, and if they die, I am now emotionally attached to them and will cry.

The Meh/The Bad:

Really, nothing comes to mind for these two categories. (Except, of course, another cliffhanger.)

Personal Insights:

The only thing holding this story back from a traditional 8/8 on the scale is the length, I feel wrong giving a short story an 8. But it really is that good. 7/8

tl;dr

Please, admins, make both of these into a storygame or a longer story. They're both fantastic and I would love to see more. I'm certainly going to read all of your other stories. Thanks for sharing these. This was a tough decision, I really enjoyed both, but I'm going to cast my vote for Story B.

Gosh, must have been hallucinating! Time to figure out if it were a dagger or a bag of ashes...

It's awfully hard to vote when both the stories are the exact same... 

That's one way to get motivation. ^-^ Smart! Looking forward to Monday!