Thanks for the advice

Okay I will do that and see if I actually succeed in improving my grammar..........They Should really create a program that corrects your writing for you for people like me who are bad with grammar,spelling/punctuation, and etc

It Is Very Interesting and well written so far keep up the good work :)

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                                                                   Better Than The First Right?

                                                                     A Very Rainy Night

I rushed out of my apartment into the pouring rain almost instantly feeling the frigid air of the dark night like a slap to my face. I keep finding my thoughts drifting to my cosy,warm apartment surely my parents will understand if I cancel tonight right? I quickly rid myself of the thought as I trek on hugging my arms close to my chest trying to hold as much warmth as I possibly can close to my body.I walk through the dark dim lit streets for what seems like an eternity.I am relived when I turn onto the street where the restaurant I am supposed to be meeting my parents Is.My relief is cut short when I hear footsteps coming from behind me echoing off the empty street.I quicken my pace, but within seconds I feel a sharp pain on the back of my head.The last thing I see is a dark silhouette bending over me and the sound of a car approaching.My vision fades to black as I find myself slipping into a state of unconsciousness.

@TacocaT Yeah........it is a bit rude but I needed to hear it i admit that......I didn't really think before I typed it and now I realize that i probably shouldn't have typed it because their are probably a ton of people my age who can write better and i apologize for being so self centered..........It Probably comes from the fact that I am overly confident in my abilities.

@betaband, Sorry about playing the age card didn't mean to annoy anyone and I apologize if I did annoy you with what i said. For Future reference I will try not to use it. Though I still remain confident in my abilities as a writer and know that many 13 year olds are exceptional writers and some's skills as writers exceed mine.But even saying this, I still believe that my skills as a writer are at least above average for my age. I also thank you for taking the time to review what I have written and put forth your opinion to help me to Improve my writing.  

Okay thanks for your input guys im sort of new at this and i appreciate that you took the time to tell me what you think i like to think that i write pretty well for 13 btw making changes now

Here is an excerpt of the story i am working on I would appreciate it if you guys can tell me what you think of it

                                                                  A Very Rainy Night

I rushed out of my apartment into the pouring rain almost instantly feeling the frigid air of the dark night like a slap to my face. I keep finding my thoughts drift to my cosy warm apartment surely my parents will understand if i cancel tonight i quickly rid myself of the thought as i trek on hugging my arms close to my chest trying to hold as much warmth as i can close to my body. I am just turning the corner to where i am supposed to be meeting my parents as i hear footsteps coming from behind me i quicken my pace but it seems i wasn't fast enough because i feel a sharp pain on the back of  my head the last thing i see is a dark silhouette and a faint flash of light before my vision fades to black.

Haven't Really thought about the forums because i have been busy writing a story

@Swiftstryker Ok Thanks i will check it out