frank2, The Contributor
Residential Lurker here on CYS. Not as famous as the new member but more forgetful than the old ones
I cannot express this enough. IT A DAMN DEMO.
Dude your story to short i'm giving it 1.
I don't care IT'S A DEMO.
just give me feed back on what i can do to make this better. Also it should be noted i'm not good with grammar. My posts reveal that.
Also i got this off my old account frank.
Years after recover from the solar wars in 2995, fossil fuels have all but vanished and the distribution of energy is unbalanced. Humanity now relies on three large-scale solar power systems controlled by three multinational power blocks: the Union, the Asian Restoration League (ARL), and the European Economic Federation (EEF). With this nearly inexhaustible source of energy benefiting only these three powers and their allies, constant warfare erupted around the globe among minor countries for precious fuels and energy. Countries whose economy relied solely on the sale of fossil fuels were plunged into poverty resulting in the twenty year-long Fossil Wars. Such a chaotic reality has lead to the creation of a paramilitary organization in possession of many highly advanced humanoid mobile suits called Gundams and a mysterious technology known as the X Drive. They call themselves Peace bringers, and their goal is nothing less than the complete eradication of war through through brutal armed intervention. You are one of many Gundam Meisters that have been approved to pilot on of these great machines in the long effort to bring the Peace Bringers goals into fruition. THIS STORY IS BASICALLY MY VERSION OF GUNDAM. The gundam franchise is owned by some one else. The pictures i used are own by their creators. The only thing i own are my characters.
Recent PostsMap of the First World on 11/8/2019 11:26:46 PM
This is the map i've been working on for a few hours in preparation for a short story thought you all may enjoy. I know i can do better with it but for now it'll serve it's purpose.
Order of the Garden on 12/9/2017 6:09:28 PM
Finished first chapter
Order of the Garden on 12/5/2017 5:08:54 PM
@mizal this is just the beginning and this scene occurs during present day. The story of the Order of the Garden will be revealed after the battle. The ghoul is actually guarding the tomb of Dakuri who wrote down the events the war (Persian Invasion of Mesopotamia and the Troy like siege that followed) and primarily focuses the narrative on the Babylonian Champion/Hero? Arnoux who is of the Order of the Garden.
Basically fight the ghoul and win so you can read Dakuri writings so you can get to the actual story (Which takes place in Babylon and Hanging Gardens)
Order of the Garden on 12/5/2017 2:50:23 PM
Excerpt from the first Chapter
Cecilia held her long sword in front of her as the group circled around the humanoid being. Though it looked like a ghoul, it being haggard and dressed in ragged clothing and rusted armor beneath those burning yellow eyes something more lay beyond.
The ghoul, for lack of better term, casually glanced from side to side as the Knights encircled him.
“This isn’t what I expected to find excavating the Hanging Gardens,” Leroy muttered into the comms as the encirclement is completed.
“I wouldn’t have expected anything less,” James said as he stared intently at the ghoul in the center. “These land have had bloodshed upon them for ages. They may be more just like him the further we excavate.”
“This doesn’t feel right...” Cecilia voiced everything about this ghoul was unique from it’s appearance to the weapon it wielded. The saber was in exquisite condition and it's bronze armor had black engravings of a tree upon it. Normally those who were chosen to become ghouls in ancient times weren’t bothered with arms as the gift of becoming undead they had little to fear from mortals who dared venture into the crypts or happen to cross their paths.
“M’lady, should we attack?” James asks yet as he did the ghoul gave his surrounding a once over before giving his sword a masterful flourish before sliding into a fighting stance.
As shocking as it was for a ghoul to be able to do that it was the stance that he had taken almost as if he was expected an attack from all sides and taken the necessary precautions for it.
“M’lady?” James asks once more his face taking on a more serious expression.
The standoff would not end by having a stare down.
"Attack," She commands as she and four rushed the ghoul from their spots in the encirclement. The others, a mixture of veterans and rookies, would wait in reserves in case those of the initial charge died or needed to be swapped out.
They jumped at the unique ghoul like wolves, lightning-fast, silently, and without warning. Blades whizzed through the air and the chamber echoed with the mournful clangs and shings of clashing steel. At first, all you could hear was swords clashing, sighs, moans, and heavy breathing.
And then, suddenly and unexpectedly, the Knights Hospitaller began to scream and die.
James was the first; dropping to his knees after being run through by the ghoul's blade before the ghoul followed up by delivering a savage arc that, mercifully or perhaps not, was a glancing blow. He moaned in agony as blood began to pool.
Another, who Cecilia recognized as James' squire, jumped into the fray yet her inexperience showed as they hadn't joined the battle when the pace was still fast and almost immediately her head was detached from her neck.
"What the fuck is this!?" Leroy screams.
Order of the Garden on 12/3/2017 5:38:20 PM
The Great War, the war between the Persian Empire and the Empire of Babylon, began after Cyrus turned his attention to ancient city. Cyrus demanded one thing from Babylon and that was the city and lands surrounding it. The Babylonian Emperor naturally refused to give up the capital and said thusly to Cyrus’ envoys. It seemed that Cyrus expected this answer from the Emperor and immediately began to lead an army against Babylon. At Karim, the troops gathered led by the Cyrus himself and filled with the most renowned warriors from his campaigns — Abbas, Karen, Hadi, Salar, Nozar, Gideon of Judea and the two warriors named Lencho. For five years the Babylonians and Persian fought in the cities and countryside in the north and western region of the Babylonian empire where the Persians emerged victorious more often than not and who pushed steadily towards the Tigris mere miles from Babylon, but the city itself, well fortified and commanded by Somal and other sons of the royal household, held out. Yet our tale focuses on the Order of the Garden. Who to the surprise of both Empires have unexpectedly decided to draw their swords in defense of Babylon.
Inspiration: Trojan War, Persian invasion of Mesopotamia, The Bible, Berserk
First: @Bucky @Mizal Who knew it took a little plagiarism to get someone to finally respond to my post in the workshop for no one wanted to say anything when I originally posted what I had above????. I'll remember for next time.
Second: do you want it written in the ballad poem format because I originally planned to write it out like so.
Outline: Prologue, Archeologist from the Knights Hospitaller discover the lost works of Dakuri of Uruk and present their findings to the ailing Grandmaster who desires to hears the tale of old.
Order of the Garden on 12/2/2017 7:51:10 AM
bla lThe Order of the Garden.
My watch begins. It shall not end until my death.
A warrior order only dedicated to the protection of the Hanging Gardens of Babylon. They ignore the call to arms from the Babylonian King in his war against the Amori Hegemony who have pushed his and his allies back behind the Tigris near the great walls of Babylon.
I shall take no wife, hold no lands, father no children. I shall not kneel to no king nor interfere in the wars they wage.
Yet, The Order has broken the neutrality they carried since The Orders finding our founding.
I shall live and die at my post. I am the guardian of the accursed tree.
I am the gaurdian of the fertile falls. I am the shield that guards the realms of men from the eldritch knowledge of old.
December Contest on 12/1/2017 10:45:58 PM
CYS-Steam Group get together on 9/21/2017 10:51:09 PM
I have seen that our little voyage into the gaming world of Steam hasn't really taken off so I propose the following:
Let October be the month we change all of this!
I would like for everyone to make a list of three multiplayer games that you enjoy or at least what Steam forces down your notification throats that would bring our scattered community together. It can games like Civ or TF2 or CS:Go or even a grand campaigns on games such Hearts of Iron or Total War.
I'm not an administrator but I will try to reach out to whoever in charge of our group, or possibly create a new one and see how we may better organize this. I am thinking about a voting system to select Octobers chosen game(s) and possibly having a contest for bragging rights and possibly points if I can get CYS main to get behind it.
I personally would like to hear your thoughts about this and any input from you guys will be very appreciated.
RTS Games on 5/14/2017 10:59:05 AM
Sins of a Solar Empire: Rebellion. If you want that Star Wars/Stark Trek rts game.
I'm old now on 5/3/2017 8:36:58 PM