I'm going out.

This is a nice setup for a story and a good first page. It helps set the tone for the story and helps the reader get into the story, at least a little bit. From there, it kind of goes downhill. The pages beyond the first page all feel very short. There are very few details on each page. There are few descriptions. The author could add a lot more details for each location: look to engage all five senses when you’re writing a story. Look for ways to describe everything the main character sees, feels, and hears. If you, as the author, can put yourself in the story, then you can help put the reader in the story – and that’s why many people read stories, to experience something else in another place.

The story itself is also quite short. I can appreciate the different options, paths, and different endings. I did have fun exploring and finding lots of different endings, which is really good for a CYOA story. But each page leading to those endings was quite short. This could be a lot more of a story with a bit more effort and just more description on each page. The story could likely be expanded by 10x the word count simply by writing more on each of the pages that already exist.

BORING ONLY A CERTAIN AMOUNT OF OPTIONS AND NOTHING TO DO

hello i like it

just pretty short

anita max wynn

very shoutey sporty love speople has lots of frenids

short good game

Daddy y

WHAT THE HELL OMG WHAT

i not read