Steve24833, The Expert Scrivener

Member Since

3/6/2015

Last Activity

12/18/2018 7:18 PM

EXP Points

2,683

Post Count

5105

Storygame Count

15

Duel Stats

22 wins / 19 losses

Order

Lauded Sage Exemplar

Commendations

234

Hi, I'm Steve, pleasure to meet you. I'm an admittedly brash, narcissistic Irish college student who has wandered onto the internet to have some craic and write something. Feel free to check out my games listed down below, I hope you enjoy them.

Anyhow, read my work, or yell at me, or search through my points to see what I've done if you're weird and value that as a use of your time.

 

Quotes

"STEVE is the cause of my anger." The Final Brennon

"Steve is a loudmouthed piece of dogshit but we should pity him, life must not be easy for an inbred ginger freak who has to lash out on an internet forum whenever the constant wanking while crying with repressed Catholic guilt because be can't decide whether he likes dicks or tits (because his sister has both) all just becomes too much. His writing is shittier than anyone will admit and I hate him more than anyone in this site." Mizal.

"He's a half-fag degenerate who hates America." Endmaster

"People who quote themselves are retards." Steve24833

"Steve is degenerate filth and an embarrassment to the human race." Axiom

"Steve is undialectical trash and belongs in a gulag." Malkalack

"Steve has made me question every belief I have held up until now about the inherent goodness of people." Will11

"Steve, you have a puny brain and the attention span of a retarded child." JJJ-thebanisher

"Steve is the site's Down Syndrome baby that we all wish we had aborted long ago, but it's too late now, though he is mildly endearing in a drooling retard sort of way." BerkaZerka

"Here you are, throwing insults like a toddler with a dictionary." RoyalGhost_007

"You might be (the greatest writer of all motherfucking time)." Mayana

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Won 2016 Contest for new School-based Storygames Having 5 Storygame(s) Featured Rated 67.5% of all Stories Given by BerkaZerka on 11/11/2018 - BZ's Creatures of The Night Winner (tie with mizal) Given by EndMaster on 02/09/2016 - For continual output of quality stories. Given by JJJ-thebanisher on 03/05/2017 - Because you work hard and contribute a lot and deserve nice things Given by Will11 on 01/15/2017 - For your countless fantastic stories

Storygames

Featured Story Achilles
coauthor

Take control of General Achilles, a human General trying to lead the human fleet to prosperity through politics and military means, while dealing with keeping humanity and it's allies together, dealing with a barbaric race of raiders and a powerful alien alliance. Will humanity crush it's enemies under it's boots? Will you form a peaceful coalition between all species? Or will you become humanity's downfall?

This is my first game, which I made with the help of Steve24833. I really hope you enjoy it. Please comment on any bugs, mistakes or other screw-ups I made. 

Hey, the sequel's here, Achilles II: The Chykri. Enjoy it!


Achilles II: The Chykri
coauthor

Play as Achilles, the leader of the new Coalition of humans, aliens and machines, to combat a new threat: The Chykri. Attempt to keep the Coalition together and fight not only to win, but to survive.

This is a sequel to our previous game, Achilles. We hope you enjoy it. Please rate and comment. Unless you don't like it, in which case just grumble to yourself about how this one isn't as good as the first. Thanks.

EDIT: Had to do some light work. Changed it so surrendering to Chykri grants alternative final chapter instead of sending back to start, checked grammar, changed a few more mistakes. Please message me or Steve if you find any bugs.


Among the Trees

Take control of Jacob, a young settler in New England in the late 17th Century. A tale of romance, horror and strange supernatural creatures awaits you in the odd and interesting woods that surround your home.

Well, this is just a short little romance-horror thing I made in three days to distract me from other projects. I hope you enjoy!


Blooded

Take control of Samuel, a young man thrust into a world of bloodthirsty creatures of the night, howling beasts cursed by the moon, horrifying demons and worse.

This is our entry for Bucky's 2016 Halloween Contest. Enjoy!


Dawnwood

Take control of a teenager moving to Dawnwood, a boring town deep in the south in the middle of nowhere. Still, the town holds many deep and dark secrets, many of which you will uncover soon...


Featured Story Fear the Psyker

Take control of Karth, a child with incredible powers born into a simple tribe on a feral world, as your life is torn apart by the arrival of the forces of Chaos. Fall into line as an obedient-slave soldier and fulfil your role as a trained killer, rise up against beings of pure hate and malice to try gain your freedom, or simply try to survive in a galaxy of horrors.

Well, I tried to write a Fanfiction based on Warhammer 40'000. If you're not familar with the series, don't worry, you don't need to be to play this. I hope you enjoy!


Featured Story In the Pale Moonlight

There are men in this world who were born to have the weight of the world on their shoulders, to have the horrors of the night carved into their souls, to see what shouldn't be seen and to defeat it. You are one of those men. You are a Hunter.

There are dark things that plague the night, things beyond what any soul should have to deal with. Things made from darkness and nightmares, things that feed upon the blood and flesh of the innocent, things that rule the night and loathe the living. These are your prey.

It is the night of your thirteenth hunt. It is time for you to take up your arms and to do what needs to be done, and make sure it's safe to walk at night once more.

This is an entry for the Creatures of the Night contest. There's thirteen endings to find, so good luck finding them. Thanks for playing, and above all, enjoy!


Mazkil

Take control of a young, aggressive Orc named Mazkil, of the Tribe the Red Blades, in his attempt to make his way in the world. Become an honored Chieftain of your tribe or become a feared Soldier for the Kingdom of Man.

Please comment and rate, tell me if you find any bugs. Enjoy!


Featured Story Prometheus Academy

Take control of Mia, a student at Prometheus Academy, a school designed for creating super-soldiers, trained killers, unstoppable super-humans, skilled secret agents and above all, super-villains, and get revenge against the Crimson Cape, a super who's taken everything from you. 

This is the winner of the 2016 School-based Contest, so yay! Thanks to all who voted. I hope you all enjoy it.


Prophecy

There is a prophecy that one day, the barrier between reality and that which lies beyond will weaken. That day the great Mol'Chu will come forth, for it has its infinite eyes set upon this realm. It will drive all creatures to the realms of insanity and torment. However, the prophecy also tells of a great hero who will rise up, and the fate of the world will lie in his hands.

You are not that hero. You are a Ratling, your blood as weak as can be, your lineage one of thieves and cowards. Still, with your path there's a chance for betterment. You might be able to lift yourself up and find yourself some power in this world. Power you will wield. 

Thanks to WouldntItBeNice for beta-reading this, they were a great help. This is my longest storygame so far and I've decided to delve into some fantasy again. Anyhow, I hope you all enjoy!


Featured Story Saoirse

It is 1914. With fears of a war with Germany finally coming to pass, the British Empire has been plunged into war. While the Great War rages on, there is a resurgence of the Irish Independence movement, as the Irish people rise up to take advantage of the times to claim their freedom. You'll be taking the role Michael McCarthy, a young man in such a troubled and turmoil-filled time. Take part in the 1916 Rising, the War of Independence and the Treaty War as brother is pitted against brother, friend against friend and father against son, as a country at war with itself is torn apart.

Well, seeing as it's been 102 years since the 1916 Easter Rising, I'd say an Edutainment game is appropriate to tell the story of the Irish struggle for independence. For the purposes of narrative and to allow choice, your character is a fictional one and at certain points will replace roles done by other men in real life to facilitate the narrative and to allow for choice and interaction, so that you'll be able to see and play a role in key events throughout the period. Enjoy!


The Nightmare Realm

Take control of James, a young boy who has suffered from horrific nightmares all his life that seem to be far more real than anyone else thinks, their effects seeping into the real world as your entire life becomes a nightmare. Try to stay sane throughout your miserable existence, while trying to end this curse and find some way to stop this hell.

Well, it's Halloween, and I haven't written anything in a while, so before your old Irish feen goes out and about on sesh, I thought I'd publish this. Enjoy!


The Only Lights in the Darkness are Flames

Take control of four members of SWAT in Tijuana raid a large, ancient mansion inhabited by the Espada de Dios, a Satanist cult that's kidnapped several people. Switch between these members as they stumble upon a horrific scene of horror, gore and perhaps something much worse...

This is my second horror story, a short little game I made just to help with Writers' Block on my larger games. Thanks to MasonJarGuzzi for proofreading. Enjoy!


Featured Story The Path of Death

Take control of Dagden, a small Orc child taken from his family and taken prisoner in Reaper Castle under the control of the Grand Necromancer, before making friends with his daughter Blaise and choosing how to make your mark in the world.

This is my spin-off to Mazkil, except better, longer and with more things you like and less things you don't like, whatever they may be. Somehow, I've appealed to everyone! I'd like to thank the OKish Mizal for beta-reading and helping me sort through this storygame and make it readable, she was a fantastic help. Please rate, comment and tell me if you find any bugs. Thanks, and enjoy!


Warped

Take control of Karth, a young, powerful Psyker who has managed to lead a slave army to take over a massive battleship, and now has the whole galaxy at the tip of his fingers. Embrace the gifts of the Dark Gods and all the power and corruption it brings, sell your services to the highest bidder, take to the stars as a feared raider and pirate or try to find a peaceful existence among the dark and cruel stars. As the anarchic and terrifying Kaam the Prophet, loyal servant of Malice, rises up in the galaxy with a bloodlust for psykers and servants of the Warp, attempt to take down the champion of a destructive God that seeks to tear the galaxy apart.

This is a sequel to Fear the Psyker. It's my longest story yet and it has a lot of variables, so if, or more accurately, when you encounter any bugs, please do send them on, and I'll try my best to fix them. Also, the Score variable doesn't have anything to do with success, it's just a few variables to tell me what various choices commentators made and what endings they got.

Thanks to Seto and DiniTheWizard for beta-reading this! Anyhow, enjoy!


Draconic
unpublished

The Draconic creatures once ruled the realm with an iron claw, gods among men. The brutal and animalistic Wyverns hunted as they pleased, the honored and fierce Lizardmen spread across the lands and growing to the billions, the Dragonborn built civilizations of incredible size and discovered magic and technology beyond man's wildest dreams, with the true Dragons lived as gods turned to flesh and bone. 

You are none of these powerful creatures. You are a Kobold.

Your species is one of servants, of pawns, of grunts, of disposable warriors that live and die according the will of your dragon masters, lacking the strength, the speed, the magic, the power or even the size bestowed by the Gods to the rest of the Draconic races, surviving only by wits and numbers.

Now, as the dying embers of the once-great draconic races, your tribe is facing extinction at the hands of the young races. You won't let the Draconic flame be snuffed out with you. No, you shall ensure that the world witnesses the flames of your glory, flames that only your kind can create.

You will prove you are truly Draconic.


Articles Written

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An article about how to write a villain protagonist that's evil and dark, while still being lovable and someone we want to support in their struggle.

Recent Posts

Can’t think of a good title on 12/18/2018 6:37:25 PM

Fuck it, people aren't forced to read your work. You should write for yourself. Write because it's how you want to express yourself, and because you want to create something. If people want to read or look at it, sure, that's cool and great for you. They can stop reading, they're not being forced to, so no matter how shit what you write is, it'll have had value to you, and maybe it'll bring something out in a few other people. 

Your work should, above all, have something from you. Some element that only your strange, weird and ever so fucked up little mind can come up with. Anything you create should come with a little spark of individuality, in which case, it'll have something no other writer or artist's work can have. Being uniquely from you is something that gives something value in and of itself.


Cancelled Nazi game on 12/18/2018 10:38:16 AM

This is a super interesting and fucked up game, but its the most boring, bland, awful Youtuber possible for this video. Checked the Youtube comments, actually, they were hilarious. It was a bunch of people talking about how this was PC bullshit, and we shouldn't see Jews as victims when they're the ones in charge and how this definitely wasn't offensive.

 


50 words story thread. on 12/14/2018 5:16:21 AM

Eh, I don't like it. It seems fairly generic and bland, and not really much of a story, and certainly not really saying much with its word count, which I think is the most impressive thing. All for it to end with a pun or a play on words or whatever, quite annoying.


50 words story thread. on 12/12/2018 4:37:19 PM

That could've worked. I feel an issue is that there isn't really many insults for terrorists you can use that haven't been directed towards Muslims, but you could use "Charlie" or "Viet Cong" for a Vietnamese veteran. 


50 words story thread. on 12/12/2018 11:22:14 AM

My issue with terrorist as an exact phrasing was more its general usage as a kind of general "Bad Guy" thing. Something akin to another war, like a Viet Cong, might've worked if you focused on the quick-paced reactive nature, or a flashback potential, rather than just reacting to someone in the house, but in 50 words, I see the issue you had.


50 words story thread. on 12/12/2018 8:30:13 AM

While the idea itself is solid and interesting, I feel the actual language could've used work. Cut a bit to give m you more of a word count, focusing less on the actions and more on the general PTSD-stricken mind and paranoia.

As a side note, I'd take out the "Die you fucking terrorist bastards!" line, because it seems quite childish and lacking. Words like "Die!" or "terrorist bastards" just seem very iffy. I don't really see anyone outside a cliched action hero in a bad film or a kid playing a video game saying it. Saying or shouting anything in a real life or death situation seems kind of unrealistic. It can be cool as a quip or something, but even then it has to be funny or at least badass, and that's not the mood you're going for.

As a sign of a fucked up mental state, if that was what you were going for, frantic mutterings seem better, or even just something more simplistic.


Damage Control. on 12/12/2018 8:15:53 AM

Oh, OK. I thought there wa some twist I was missing.


50 words story thread. on 12/12/2018 8:14:14 AM

Oh, missed this. Good one, Eb. Great days these were.


50 words story thread. on 12/11/2018 6:08:56 PM

This one was pretty good. Besides the criticisms already mentioned, everything else was great.


50 words story thread. on 12/11/2018 6:07:52 PM

This one was pretty cool, good job.