A pony's story

Player Rating1.34/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 41 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

You play as a unicorn who can't remember what has happened to her/himself. There is only 1 good ending and 1 bad ending. I was gonna make this story game on my first account, but i can't remember the password to it, so, yeah. :P Btw this is my first story game.

Player Comments

Waste of time and space

-- corgi213 on 9/22/2018 11:02:35 PM with a score of 0
What was that? Pegasister here! You ruined MLP!

Pegasister o-u-t out!
-- Jayfeatherlova on 7/5/2016 8:24:42 PM with a score of 0
Three minutes of my life I'll never get back.
-- Bolt78625 on 7/22/2015 2:53:01 PM with a score of 0
what was this?
-- AthenaT on 6/10/2015 1:14:42 PM with a score of 0
sooooooooooooooooooooo scary *laphing* kidding
-- katkid98 on 3/9/2015 3:29:02 PM with a score of 0
Well I always try to be constructive and give good and bad points but I do get a distinct impression that this story is a set up...

The links all worked and the spelling and grammar are not actually as bad as some stories on this site.

The actual story was really non-existent. it seemed like the first rushed pages in a story where an author rail-roads you to throw out the names of characters so they can get to the story itself. But then that was it, with a gratuitous dead added in.

As I said, I get the impression that this is a plant to get reactions rather than a real story but judging by the score and response it will be removed soon either way
-- FeanorOnForge on 2/19/2015 3:12:29 PM with a score of 0
You really need to stop making stories.
-- LedinFX on 2/17/2015 7:51:38 PM with a score of 0
Wow! Just Wow! (And not in a good way). This game has to be the most horrible game I have ever played!

*burns in holy fire*
-- Claw2k11 on 2/17/2015 10:11:43 AM with a score of 0
Whuuuut?
-- Wolfmist on 2/16/2015 1:09:41 PM with a score of 0
Okay. Instead of criticizing and leaving, I'm going to tell you what you did wrong and what you could change.

First of all, it was rather short, and there isn't really a moral or plot of the story. Maybe you could edit it and make it longer, with an evil villain or one of your friends turns evil, etc.

Try capitalizing the names next time, otherwise I don't see how anyone can tell what's a name and what isn't.

Thanks for reading this, and with a little bit of what I suggested and more, I betcha you could make this an 8/8.
-Flamepelt
-- Flamepelt43 on 2/15/2015 3:15:03 PM with a score of 0
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