A Strange Day in July
, #63 for
played 774 times (finished 119)
"no possible way to lose"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
It's a rather linear story, but I tried to make the choices as significant as I could.
You were obviously trying to make an emotionally moving story, but without getting more information about the relationship, it's very difficult to relate to the characters. Instead of statements about how close they are or how long they've known each other, try showing a few moments where their relationship developed. Perhaps as flashbacks.
You should also make it much clearer what the choices are and who is making them. Are we choosing Emma's actions?
If you include supernatural elements like changelings, it's important to explain what that means.
But not bad for a little first story.
on 5/22/2012 9:22:15 AM
This felt very disjointed.
on 6/24/2017 12:18:56 AM
Very short and didn't understand much of the story, but for a fantasy amusement it isn't too horrible
on 5/24/2017 6:46:57 PM
Well, this wasn't really a game I was looking for, because it didn't really have any sort of emotional explanations as to what was going on, it talked about their relationship, but other than that, it wasn't quite as detailed as I would have wanted it to be. I don't even mind that the story was short.
on 2/21/2017 12:02:32 PM
This story was confusing. Why would an inseparable best friend call his friend a freak and make fun of them for an hour? What is a changeling? What is the horrible thing that happened at the lake? Why does she cry so much? What does July have to do with anything?
on 2/20/2017 8:48:02 PM
Sorry but way to short and I couldn't tell if I was the changeling or not sorry I rate 1
-- Brandon on 2/19/2017 2:22:14 PM
I didn't know what was really going on. Judging by the other people's reviews,I was not sure if i was playing as a character or a being. there are a few grammar errors too.
on 5/21/2016 6:58:38 PM
Nice, but I didn't really understand.
-- Kate on 5/21/2016 5:32:53 PM
What happened???! I couldn't follow it!
-- Joe on 2/1/2016 3:55:04 PM
Because of the choices, the story itself was hard to follow.
on 6/24/2015 12:37:16 AM
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