Player Comments on Celestial Lies: Chapter Two

I played through it a few times...

This is quite disappointing, because chapter one was a lot better then this. I understand making part ones, part twos, etc can sometimes make it feel like you need to publish things as soon as possible, but please spend more time on your storygames.

I loved chapter one, but this had a large drop in quality, for many reasons, such as a more boring plot, a very confusing writing style, less detail, and very undesriptive events.

There were mutiple errors throughout this storygame. Proofreading is very crucial, and compared to chapter one, this was lacking emotion, detail, character development...

I think you should have spent more time on this, because it feels as if it was written by a completely different person in all honesty.

3/8, a step down. Try harder please.
-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 12:23:29 AM with a score of 0
This is a serious drop in writing quality from Chapter One of Celestial Lies. While it's not terrible, the writing is sloppy (eg. "Just a few hours, you were finding freedom" has no "ago" in it) and doesn't keep me interested.

The narrative was confusing. I'm not entirely sure how we ended up here after the events of Chapter One, but I rolled with it. Again, the storygame was very linear. I appreciate that you've actually put in some proper choices that don't lead to instant death, but there's still only one way to "win" this storygame.
-- October on 3/3/2013 10:59:28 AM with a score of 165
This is a very significant step down from your first part of the series. Not only are all of the problems from the first part still prevalent but your major strength from part 1 (the quality of the writing) is not a strength here. This story is fraught with grammatical errors and especially numerous tense errors. This was carelessly edited and squanders much of the potential that the series carried.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 11/19/2012 5:58:49 PM with a score of 130
It doesn't seem like a good idea to revive a character that has been epicly killed off at the last second. All in all this was a good story and I enjoyed it but it could have been longer and had less false branches/decisions.
It also feels a little rushed, you could always take some time to flesh out some of the options some more and turn them into branches.
-- corgi213 on 11/4/2017 1:28:40 AM with a score of 630
I gave you a 5. I highly recommend you add pictures for items
-- Saint_999 on 9/10/2017 6:53:43 PM with a score of 130
Well, is it a way to defeat the fiend in the portal???
-- TestingJest on 8/14/2017 5:04:37 AM with a score of 130
It was too short. I didn't read half of text because I found the text not interesting. It progresses to fast.
-- galobtter on 3/9/2013 8:49:33 AM with a score of 630
pretty fun. cant wait till the next one
-- EragonMax490 on 12/17/2012 12:29:40 PM with a score of 630
Cool story, but where are my friends from the first game, and how did I get in a desert?
-- Amy2 on 10/21/2012 8:58:28 PM with a score of 600
good bye cruel world i dead now!
-- tigerxii on 10/12/2012 4:59:26 PM with a score of 100
This seems shorter than the first, but still, good writing.
-- Xt1000305 on 8/4/2012 12:14:53 PM with a score of 630
It's an alright story. Might of been a bit more interesting if it was longer.
-- Ferionion on 6/11/2012 5:31:40 PM with a score of 115
Pretty awesome
-- RobustSporadic on 6/2/2012 12:44:53 AM with a score of 100
Sweet game, but it is so short you should only be able to use the knives 2 or 3 times.
-- betaband on 5/22/2012 8:15:41 PM with a score of 630
Nice one once again, hope I got the best score. Let's see...
-- Poet on 3/7/2012 11:48:58 PM with a score of 630
you could've done so much better :(
-- alienalpha on 9/18/2011 5:53:32 PM with a score of 680
it was ok kinda simple
-- SEULaw on 9/16/2011 11:40:26 PM with a score of 630
I like it. 5/8
-- ThisisBo on 9/13/2011 10:17:49 PM with a score of 100
Pretty good. Keep up the good work!
-- Killer999 on 9/12/2011 1:01:54 PM with a score of 130
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