Love & Dating
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played 53,630 times (finished 2,907)
"no possible way to lose"
"A well spent lunch break"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
A boy and a girl in a shattered land.
In this world, there can be no chance for happy endings.
Not bad :)
This storygame was really good in many ways, and while i'm not usually too fond of Love & Dating stories (usually because they're almost always short with hardly any branching and similar endings), I found this one to have plenty of effort put into it.
It was longer than I expected from the 4/8 length rating, but it might only feel longer than it is due to it having many pages and choices, but few words in general.
The pages in this game are either a nicely written, detailed groups of paragraphs, while others just contain a sentence or two. Please work on keeping a constant quality streak while writing so the quality doesn't spread thin in some areas.
The fact that you can easily feel emotion while reading this and understand the characters feels due to the descriptions given proves that you're no doubt talented in fleshing out the character development and emotion.
Some of the choices (notably the first ones) lead to the same place, but nonetheless, the branching was rather impressive in my opinion.
I'll say 5/8, there's room for improvement.
on 6/19/2017 1:17:05 AM with a score of 0
I found this story entertaining--not a whole lot of details, but this is a Choose Your Own Adventure thing and not a huge novel, so I can forgive that. Because of that, I don't mind the lack of development between Kei and Kite--and I'm sure much of it happened off-screen that just didn't get shown. But, regardless, I liked the story, loved the ending I got--twisted and I was okay with the maturity, but it was really sweet. My only REAL nitpick is the lack of back-story; I would've enjoyed more of that, but I can forgive it.
-- Tsukaiz on 4/19/2012 11:55:04 PM with a score of 0
A little too brief and short for my liking, but the writing is expressive and the length probably suited to people who only want to read a quick, short story. Feels like a summarized version of a much longer story, maybe of another game, perhaps? The options provided carried compelling emotional consequence, and the resulting description of the characters' state of mind was believable. Some parts of the writing could still use a better choice of words, i.e. there is still room for improvement. But then that could be said for just about all writing (regardless of author) and the quality here is still quite good and much better than most of the works on this site. Keep it up, would love to see more work from this author.
-- WanderingPlayer on 7/17/2011 7:50:14 PM with a score of 0
Please have more unzipping of pants
-- Nick Gurr on 4/24/2019 2:46:19 PM with a score of 0
it was pretty good, could be longer maybe
on 4/13/2019 11:50:45 PM with a score of 0
I didn’t really understand the ending. What is Kite anyways? Is Yumiko good or bad?
on 2/21/2019 3:03:31 AM with a score of 0
Good job! A little vague at some points, but a truly great story that you tried to tell. Well done.
on 11/25/2018 6:46:22 AM with a score of 0
i give this story two words bor- ing
-- Ashley on 6/21/2018 6:43:41 PM with a score of 0
on 5/20/2018 4:30:26 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed it. It could improve, but it was quite good and I hope to see more in the future.
on 4/17/2018 7:39:34 PM with a score of 0
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