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The Ghost People
This is an entry in the December contest

Writing Prompt: "In 100,000 B.C.E., a boy from a Neanderthal tribe meets a homo sapien girl for the first time, changing the fate of their tribes for all time . . . for better or worse."

A Neanderthal boy is sent on a perilous mission to rescue kidnapped members of his tribe from the clutches of the evil Ghost People, whose magic far surpasses that of his own people.

Some quick info on the setting: It is generally believed that hominids lost their thick fur around 1.2 million years ago or so, give or take. However, for the sake of this story, Homo neanderthalensis will have thicker body hair than Homo sapiens (not bear-thick, but still thicker). There are two reasons I have chosen to do this: (1) They lived in the colder regions. (2) Homo neanderthalensis appears to have had primitive clothing compared to Homo sapiens; basically just fur capes, while Homo sapiens had more advanced stitching and more tightly tailored clothing (which kept them more warm). So I feel having neanderthals a little more hairy than Homo sapiens is a reasonable liberty for me to take in this story.

As for language and technology, both Homo sapiens and Homo neanderthalensis shared almost identical vocal anatomy where it matters. Despite neanderthals not having left behind nearly as much advanced artwork, they very likely had complex language just like Homo sapiens. As for fire technology, for the purpose of this story I am assuming that different hominid tribes were further advanced than others, irrespective of species. The neanderthal tribe the protagonist comes from has yet to master creation of fire.

Anyway, I hope you enjoy!

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How do you find out your word count on 1/18/2018 10:05:48 AM
for both published and unpublished stories?

Contest Entry Submission Thread on 1/13/2018 8:06:56 AM
Is it possible to edit our published stories? I found a couple things I need to edit.

Contest Entry Submission Thread on 1/7/2018 5:41:28 PM
Also, recommended listening as you read, to set the mood: Ancient Music - Ice Age

Contest Entry Submission Thread on 1/7/2018 5:39:31 PM
The Ghost People

I appreciate all the people who read this. It's probably not among the best you've seen, but I did try to create a world to escape to, and hopefully it's entertaining. I've never written anything on this topic before, so it was a challenge.

The story is probably one of the shorter ones in the contest, so hopefully that works in my favor ;). There is one point where you have to use an item, and another point where you have the option to. Otherwise there isn't much by way of variables and items.

Thanks again!

December Contest on 1/7/2018 5:36:08 PM
Well I finished. Hopefully it's better than a 3.

December Contest: The Ghost People (option #1) on 1/7/2018 5:34:18 PM
Thanks. But it's really odd. The images are now all working. I think it might have been the hosting site after all. I guess from time to time the images won't be there.

December Contest: The Ghost People (option #1) on 1/7/2018 4:26:55 PM
Some of my images don't seem to be loading, but I think it's just a temporary problem with the image hosting sight.

December Contest: The Ghost People (option #1) on 1/7/2018 4:11:24 PM
Thanks. But in truth I am not really sure how good this story is. Still, this was a fun exercise. Just got to read through it and make sure there are no grievous errors. I'm sure I've screwed up some part of the items/variables, but hopefully the judges cut me some slack given my inexperience. ;)

December Contest on 1/7/2018 4:09:11 PM
I should be ready to publish this in just about an hour. I just hit publish and then paste the link that comes when I play the game?

December Contest: The Ghost People (option #1) on 1/7/2018 4:08:12 PM
Well I believe I'm finished. Just doing some last minute polishing.