Player Comments on Dirty Laundry > ChooseYourStory.com

Very short, no background on the story, but not the worst ever.

— hayesa on 2/10/2015 8:50:57 PM with a score of 4

It sucked

— Captianobvious11 on 12/25/2014 11:21:40 PM with a score of 3

It was kind of funny, but overall lacked in effort.
2/8

— Mtactical on 12/2/2014 9:09:58 AM with a score of 3

I like I think it would've been better if it was longer.

— CoRn_PoPs on 11/27/2014 1:05:47 PM with a score of 3

Nice, I liked your game. Not bad. Although, I would probably be like, "hey, this is your house, clean it your own darned self."

— Shinobi on 11/20/2014 10:37:20 PM with a score of 3

I don't understand this

— Huff on 11/18/2014 10:30:59 PM with a score of 3

This sucked in all possible ways

— m on 8/13/2014 4:45:45 PM with a score of 1

Well that was boring. There isn't much of a choice in any of this.

— Madbrad200 on 7/26/2014 8:32:10 AM with a score of 3

Boring.

— Kiel_Farren on 5/18/2014 4:43:54 AM with a score of 3

this is bad and degrading

— atmosbolt on 4/22/2014 10:10:50 AM with a score of 1

Cleaned the house completely, and nearly died of boredom.

— EarthCollision on 3/21/2014 2:33:30 PM with a score of 3

Well.................it's okay

— dischead on 10/29/2013 12:51:30 AM with a score of 0

I liked it, very realistic of trying to get a guy to do anything he doesn't want to.

— Skysworne on 7/17/2013 6:13:21 PM with a score of 3

that was really pointless
and pointless

— epiclab on 4/17/2013 11:33:40 PM with a score of 3

Maturity Level 2/8
"choking hazard for children under 4"

uses "F" word on second page...

— Aman on 4/3/2013 11:39:39 AM with a score of 3

Why did it half to be an advanced game.

— avery2405 on 3/10/2013 4:31:58 PM with a score of 3

Short, but with ok writing

— Xt1000305 on 1/28/2013 7:11:38 AM with a score of 1

I was a little confused but then again I have the habbit of not reading everything, otherwise it was pretty neat.

— FeatheroftheSky on 12/25/2012 8:38:43 PM with a score of 1

This game is silly :p

— Briar_Rose on 11/5/2012 5:36:28 PM with a score of 3

I found this hilarious. XD I like your sense of humor so yay.^_^ Please do another one. :D this was a bit short.XD

— ChaiHai on 8/13/2012 2:47:14 AM with a score of 3

It doesn't make any sense

— Tobias-Muttley on 8/6/2012 3:44:02 PM with a score of 0

Kinda funny...

— FeeLynLove24 on 8/3/2012 2:09:32 PM with a score of 2

Short game, but I understand what the author said in the description. Needs improvement in grammar. It really wasn't much fun.

— Bubu on 7/27/2012 10:34:06 PM with a score of 4

reminds me to much of chores

— Nicpinkygirl on 6/20/2012 5:47:23 PM with a score of 3

There were SO many errors with spelling and grammar in this. A lot of random words had capital letters, which bothered me a lot. You could do better...a LOT better.

— fergie14233 on 9/28/2011 1:58:22 PM with a score of 2

What point is this?

— Lilfti332 on 7/9/2011 12:14:23 AM with a score of 3

Nothing about this story really captivated me, it was actually kind of boring

— Secretstarz7 on 6/27/2011 4:56:30 PM with a score of 1

Bo dissaproves, feel the shame wash over you

— ThisisBo on 5/16/2011 5:48:11 PM with a score of 3

Why do a game about cleaning? No offense, but really?

— tgsunrise on 5/7/2011 5:58:24 PM with a score of 3

Well... I've seen worse. I mean, the story is pointless, but whatever.

— Anubis on 8/12/2008 3:19:31 PM with a score of 1

This was quite enjoyable for being such a short and easy game. The quality of writing contributed much to its overall success. There must be a way you could space out the paragraphs or sentences to make it easier to read, though.

— Mirrormask on 8/11/2008 3:44:24 PM with a score of 2

Interesting to look into the lives of people like this, but clean-up is definitely in order. (Ironic, right?) Try google images for the items and brush up on the more advanced aspects of storygame creation for more finesse in the finished product.

— Melike on 8/3/2008 2:44:31 AM with a score of 2

Good Effort! You're on your way. Check out the articles under HELP & INFO. Seriously, they will help you.

http://www.chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/

— JJJ-thebanisher on 7/2/2008 5:43:46 AM with a score of 1

I like the fact that the whole story is about cleaning. I think I'll go clean my apartment some more now. Nice work with the variables, but like Seth said, now that you've tested them out you can make items that work.

— madglee on 6/8/2008 3:43:17 AM with a score of 3

Agree with fleshy. Even though the advanced portions are really simple, this could be pretty good if you fixed up the writing a bit. I'd suggest not bothering with items, if you aren't going to have pics or actually need to use them -- you could have just tagged the things as variables.

— Sethaniel on 6/5/2008 2:11:57 AM with a score of 2

Well it's nice that you tried and used variables, but it was too short and linear. Don't just make a whole game in only 1 or 2 days, put some more effort into it, and you could eventually be making really awesome games.