Experiment Gone Wrong?

Player Rating3.47/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 46 ratings since 01/14/2018
played 640 times (finished 64)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Do Not Expect Amazing Things, but it's not horrible either.

Well if you want to know what the story is about, play it, and guess the entire story based on the first page.

Player Comments

Not terribly written. The grammar is passable, and the prose is respectable.

My main issue with the game stems from the fact that the CONTROL variable doesn't really need to be there. It seems to get stripped away instantaneously. If it's something that gets whittled away over time that would be one thing, but as it stands right now it could easily be taken away without a huge effect on the narrative.

Also, it's interesting that you start it off immediately. We don't get to know who Ethan is as a character before he gets zombified or whatever. That's not necessarily a good or bad thing, but you might want to consider that audiences will react more with a character they know getting zombified.

Also, we don't really see very much of the world. Who is the Professor? Why is he conquering the world? These are questions that you don't even attempt to answer.

Also, it really irks me the way you force me into the zombie horde, even though my control variable is at twenty. If the control is supposed to represent my agency over my own body, I have no idea why it would become temporarily useless.

All in all, I would call this game average. It's not good, but it's not bad either. 4/8
-- Malkalack on 1/14/2018 10:26:04 PM with a score of 0
It honestly doesn't make much sense, I don't like how it's written in third person, and the CONTROL doesn't make sense either. Other than that, it isn't half bad.
-- ab on 7/23/2018 11:48:53 AM with a score of 0
I think you were being too modest. This was fun and descriptive. I can't believe this is your first. I will play again to see if I can change my fate the next time.
-- LuvLee on 5/12/2018 9:02:56 AM with a score of 0
It kept my interest so I guess yeah it's ok.It was so and so.I could write some suggestions here but I see other guys have writen things I agree with so it's useless.Nice try!
-- Persuasion on 2/20/2018 11:31:47 AM with a score of 0
After reading this, a few questions popped up.
Who am I?
Where am I?
I think more backstory is needed here. Maybe the protagonist tries to recall his family and friends to gain control and fight the infection? Just a suggestion.
Also, the control variable is interesting. You should try to have it shrink and grow over time, not just from 20 to 23 to 15 to 0.
My final nitpick is the length. I might be difficult to write a longer story with more paths, but it pays off big-time for the reader. This didn't take away from the story for me, but it's just something to consider.
Overall, I enjoyed it. It was a fresh take on the classic zombie story, with the robot thing added in. Good work, and I look forward to more.
-- ultraoverlord on 1/27/2018 10:03:39 PM with a score of 0
Damn that disease creator. Lol
-- CodeShatterer on 1/20/2018 10:21:54 PM with a score of 0
This was a good story with a very interesting idea. The control variable could have used a little more work, and whittle down over time instead of right away. This story has potential and I hope that you'll be able to work on it some more.

I would normally suggest fleshing out the background story and who the character is, but since he's a zombie the vagueness kind of fits with the story.
-- corgi213 on 1/15/2018 11:09:17 PM with a score of 0
I realize I was too generous with this game, and have changed my rating to a 3.
-- Malkalack on 1/14/2018 11:11:28 PM with a score of 0
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