Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Drone

Player Rating3.84/8

"#387 overall, #40 for 2015"
based on 194 ratings since 08/24/2015
played 3,377 times (finished 261)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

It is a typical day in the life of you when you receive a letter from Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Do you accept?

Explore a new take on Voltaire's Candide through an immersive trip into the World of Harry Potter as you write the story.

Player Comments

I'm not particularly a fan of the Harry Potter books, with the exception of seeing the first three movies. I did, however, read Voltaire's Candide. I really like all the Candide references that are sparkled into this story. From the beginning, to the love interest, and so many more. The choices are fairly fun to choose from and the descriptions on each page keep you wanting more.

I was disappointed by the abrupt ending; however. I definitely think the story could have ended a little bit better. Overall, a pretty good story. You have sparked my interest in the Harry Potter novels, and I thank you for that.
-- AppDude27 on 9/10/2015 11:24:33 PM
Before I comment on your story I actually need to take a moment to enjoy Jesika's comment, " i like the game but there is a lot of reading to do, major turn off".

Words? Sentences? I agree, you just don't need that crap in books; where are the pictures? The pop ups? The little buttons that you press which play a Disney song? When I have a book I don't want to read it! Build book forts yes, use them to make campfires yes, but reading? Eugh!

OK, moving onto the story itself gives me a strong sense of deja vu. It's nice that you've taken a stab at improving the most famous and successful series of childrens' novels in history but unless you genuinely think your writing style is am improvement on J.K's you might want to deviate from recycling her storylines almost verbatim. There was a little creativity in places but I'm not sure what it had to do with drones or Voltaire... maybe I missed something.

I'd suggest either going for straight satire or parody if you're going to write about a well-known series or just use what you read to inspire you to write your own thing (there is the 3rd path, fan fiction, but I wouldn't recommend it, Creativity will rarely be found at the end of that road).
-- Will11 on 8/25/2015 1:22:58 AM
Ok, so here's just an opinion of this story written by another Potterhead, but don't worry, it's not just about how good or bad it was in terms of keeping it close to Harry Potter-style writing. I'll give you credit, you stayed mostly consistent with the storylines, and your plot was good. It was also good to note that you stayed pretty close to Harry Potter's original story, which I thought was pretty neat. Though your writing style is different from J.K. Rowling's works, it's a refreshing take, and personally, I like the way you start this off with a mundane day in a funny way. I know that when I first started reading from the Harry Potter series for the first time, I was almost bored out of my mind reading the first chapter, so thanks for keping your readers engaged.
I'm definitely concerned about some particular things though, mainly being in how inconsistent your point of view and your writer's voice are. You broke your narration style at least once and went into first-person narration, and this confused me to no end. Also, when talking about emotions, try and describe them more. It's hard, but just try. Did the dark power of the locket give you deep, dark thoughts of committing mass murder? Did the beautiful girl inspire you to do anything for her out of gentlemanly chivalry by giving you a nice, longing stare? It would give us as the readers more attachment.
Well, now that you've read this comment from a random user on the Internet, what will you do after processing all the information?
Happy writing! :)
-- RandomPersonHere on 7/22/2019 5:45:18 PM
I liked it but it was so short.
-- Noneofurbiz on 7/14/2019 6:50:34 PM
Meh. Only about one choice makes the story branch out (barely!). Also, I don't see why you had to mention 'pants'! Snogging's one thing, but what you mentioned is another. Or at least that's how I see it. In addition, I don't like that there's only Slytherin and Gryffindor (Unless, of course, this is a polarized world where everything's black and white and two political sides are locked in a stalemate and there is no third faction). But if it is the future, why is there a locket suspiciously like the horcrux was destroyed? As well as that, I very much doubt they would expel someone for being out past curfew. After all, Harry, Ron, and Hermione are out past curfew and only get 50 points each taken away, and that could have had something to do with them being suspected of luring Draco and Neville out as well. I rather wish there were more choices. Still, over all, pretty meh.
-- Why should I tell you? on 4/19/2019 10:23:35 AM
Meh. Only about one choice makes the story branch out (barely!). Also, I don't see why you had to mention 'pants'! Snogging's one thing, but what you mentioned is another. Or at least that's how I see it. In addition, I don't like that there's only Slytherin and Gryffindor (Unless, of course, this is a polarized world where everything's black and white and two political sides are locked in a stalemate and there is no third faction). But if it is the future, why is there a locket suspiciously like the horcrux was destroyed? As well as that, I very much doubt they would expel someone for being out past curfew. After all, Harry, Ron, and Hermione are out past curfew and only get 50 points each taken away, and that could have had something to do with them being suspected of luring Draco and Neville out as well. I rather wish there were more choices. Still, over all, pretty meh.
-- Why should I tell you? on 4/19/2019 10:23:16 AM
A little too inappropriate for my taste. Dude, if you are going to put innuendos in, make the rating higher, please. The writing was pretty good, but every other option was depressing. Don't take it so seriously. Try to have fun!
-- SquattingPigeon on 2/26/2019 11:03:46 AM
i wish that u gave options for ravenclaw and hufflepuff because my house is ravenclaw and i know there are hufflepuffs
-- mary on 1/5/2019 8:04:55 PM
i think they should let you pick your gender, and add more on, but other wise its amazing, ive always wanted to go to hogwarts
-- Natalie on 1/1/2019 1:53:18 PM
Nice game... kind of short.
-- Charcoal37 on 8/12/2018 3:53:15 PM
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