High School Romance
Love & Dating
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"walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
You need a date for the homecoming dance! Can you find one in time?
Your very first game… and from a long time ago. How does it have so few comments? No matter, I’m here to put my two cents in. I have to admit, though, this is going to be tough: with the setup you’ve given in the comment and on the first page, I’m not getting my hopes up too high for this one, and I think that’s the point now. Well, if this shall be an example for others, I’ll attempt to help by attempting to clearly point out things that I think can be improved.
First page: “Hey, this is my first game.” You know, I get why people put that there. In fact, I’m pretty sure I have used almost those exact words. But that actually gets old quite quickly. After all, this story appears to be 12 years old when I’m writing this comment, and it will just get older. Again, I understand why people write that, but unless you’re sure you’re going to take the story down in a few days, I think that actually takes away from the story – it sets the story up for failure before we even start reading.
It’s a fair setup on the first page. I do really like that I’ve got a lot of options on the first page. SO many stories start out the first page with a link to the second page, so this is very nice for a choose your own story site. But that page could be developed a bit more to give hints or clues. I get that I don’t have a date and I’m shy, but I’m not completely sure which is my best avenue for success with these choices. Maybe that’s the point, but I like to perhaps have a little tiny hint or two as to which choices might work out better for me.
I went all out and for Kelly. My story ended quite quickly. It was nice that there was a pretty clear hint on that second page that I was going to go down in flames! That’s what I’m talking about when I mentioned little hints to help the reader select the option that will succeed. Playing again, I’m not sure I liked the colored dialogue. It is nice that it is clear when someone else is talking, but the red font confused me at first. I did manage to get the date, but only after clicking through a bit.
It was a nice, very short story. It does show potential and others who read this should be inspired by this as a starting point!
on 5/6/2018 10:54:14 PM
It was interesting, however not much of a story there. You either get a date or you don't, the end. On the positive side, you can redo the story a bunch of times and it still would take more than 5 minutes. I am sure as you write more stories you will get better, I do see potential.
on 10/2/2018 5:26:05 PM
I love this it’s so cute I wish it continued I wanted to find out what happened later.
-- Plasma on 9/10/2018 8:16:07 AM
Too short, terrible
-- squishy on 9/10/2018 12:30:44 AM
fun game. easy... maybe to easy. a little short
-- Crystal on 9/2/2018 1:14:48 PM
I really like this game. It gives you an idea of how a boy might ask you to a dance.
-- Mae on 9/1/2018 4:36:55 AM
It was good wish it was longer tho
-- Bailey on 8/31/2018 1:38:33 PM
I want a female version plz.
-- Rachel on 8/27/2018 11:00:55 PM
It is not really that fun but I didn't have much of a choice. But I am sure that if you keep going and making choose your story games it is positive that your games like these will become more thrilling! You can do it!!!
-- Bella on 8/27/2018 12:57:00 PM
it too short
-- bob on 8/18/2018 11:40:29 PM
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