Rylee Greening: Champion of Fitness

Player Rating2.92/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 53 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

In a world full of crossfit/swimming phonies there is only one champion: Rylee Greening. Take a step into her life of extreme fitness and try to help her impress her hero, the great Nick NcCleery. This adventure game is directed towards the GCIT DC class of 2016 and if you are not one of the "Great Eight" you will probably not get the full effect. 

Player Comments

Your writing skills are actually pretty good! The pictures were a plus, but the storygame was too short and had only one type of ending.

I don't find the story "boring" exactly, though I didn't find it very... enticing to read. I think that what you have so far is a very good mini-plot for an exposition of a storygame, so if you add more to this to make it a complete story, I think it can actually be really good because your writing skills are great.

What I did like was the realism with the woman stuck in the tree, and how she would like a piggyback ride. Nice touch there.

Despite how short it is, you incorporated a major part of the protagonist's background into the story. From that, I know that she doesn't like letting people down, is disciplined, and is hardworking. I also know that her father probably taught her that, so I can assume what the father is like.

Very nice, though too short.
-- Crescentstar on 12/8/2016 9:59:48 PM with a score of 0
If this was only aimed at a handful of specific people, it would have made more sense to leave it unpublished and just share the link with them.

This wasn't bad at all though, and so if you ever attempted a regular CYOA I'd look forward to reading it.
-- mizal on 5/7/2016 3:18:55 AM with a score of 0
-- Kate on 6/20/2016 7:09:02 PM with a score of 0
I have super speed and can fly.
-- dragon396 on 6/20/2016 12:09:08 AM with a score of 0
I got into a car chase trying to get arrested, I ran a red light trying to cause a car crash, and I tried going too fast for a turn for my car to wreck.

It felt way too easy in my opinion.
-- mattstat716 on 5/9/2016 2:27:37 PM with a score of 0
Seems fun but yeah, definitely an in-joke :) Good writing and pictures though
-- Will11 on 5/5/2016 11:21:40 PM with a score of 0
I was getting into it, then, uh, was the whole story about getting to one person? Wow, uh, okay. Better than a lot of the last stories though, so, good job?
-- RedofPalletTown on 5/5/2016 11:21:13 AM with a score of 0
There needs to be a good plot. I didn't quite understand the idea, either. Keep working on it and feel free to pm me anytime!
-- Honeydusk842 on 5/5/2016 10:21:54 AM with a score of 0
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