The Unravelling of Order

Player Rating4.63/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 15 ratings since 12/24/2020
played 144 times (finished 20)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Entry for the 2020/2021 "Dark Fantasy" Contest. 


The Old Unicorn Lands are in a fragile state of peace. Though the dark "Horned god" has been banished, the twisted monsters he has lost control over still roam the land, killing any who stray too far from the civilised realms. But worse even than the monsters are the some of the unicorns, twisted and embittered by their experiences in this unforgiving world...

A certain unicorn gains knowledge of an even greater threat than the Horned God on the horizon. Can they stop the end of time and space as we know if?

While you can, with a certain level of care, choose to whether the protagonist is an "anti-hero" or a more "straightforward hero", the vast majority of the other characters are varying degrees of flawed or cruel.


Features: This story has three different endings, depending on the choices you make.

There is also a bonus epilogue, which you can get if you choose specific dialogue options throughout the story.

Try to gather as much information as you can before deciding on anything, as clues will sometimes be made available so that the choices do not feel as if they're based on random chance.


Disclaimer:While this story takes influence from many other series, such as the universes of The Witcher,Enderal, Supernatural and the land of Equestria from My Little Pony, the events and characters in the story are not intended to take place within any of these lands, and as such the story is intended to be an original, stand-alone work.


Maturity:16+, though viewer discretion is advised for all ages. It includes


-Fantasy drug use

-Mentions of real torture devices, and some first-hand descriptions of fantastical torture

-Violence and mild gore

Player Comments

This was an odd one, I won’t lie. It’s pretty short and sweet all things considered, which while not a bad thing, I think hurts it in the long run. It’s a pretty simple story in a pretty basic format for CYOA, trying to get from point A to point B, with a generally interesting plot and ideas sprinkled in all the mediocre filler. It what it says on the tin, y’all. A pony tries to stop the world from unraveling, so if that’s not your thing-like me-you’ll probably find this story a lot less compelling.

The main character is pretty non-existent character wise, only used as a vessel for the player. I can’t fault the author too much for this, as it’s sort of a staple of the genre here, but seriously, a little bit more personality would’ve been a real help in that regard.

This is posed as a grimdark story, but I didn’t really get that angle at all in my time playing. Maybe it’s the ponies, maybe I just missed something along the way, but everything is sort of bright? I guess? It’s not matching up with what I view as grimdark either way.

Luckily, there’s few grammatical errors that I saw, which made this a lot more pleasant of a reading experience than it could’ve been otherwise. The writing style is basic, but that’s not super important in a work like this.

With that said, I don’t think this is a bad story, nor is it necessarily a great one. It does a lot of things right, and falls flat on others. I just wish there was more substance to it, is all. If you have fifteen minutes, this isn’t a bad game to scroll through, but otherwise, it’s just average, overall.
-- wheelbarrow on 12/27/2020 12:12:07 PM with a score of 0
This story-game certainly gives the impression of a grand adventure and mission being undertaken by the reader. For that reason, it reminds of classic cyoa's in a way, despite me being a pony and not some village boy turned adventurer, or some rookie knight that's way over his head with the call of the mission he's received.

The Unravelling of Order is written well, and there's never a dull moment that's happening within its pages. That much I can say about it.

A pretty enjoyable read.
-- TharaApples on 2/16/2021 10:25:36 PM with a score of 0
It's pretty good!
-- windpaw on 1/15/2021 4:07:34 PM with a score of 0
I'm just glad it wasn't porn.
-- Starbourne on 1/5/2021 11:53:07 AM with a score of 0
It is not bad, it is a very classical cyoa what is not bad, very linear with a straightforward language with interesting lore characters like the life eating trees. However, this is not grindark; it is a very moral story when it seems you have to be a goodie two shoes to win. There is no grey and there is not a sensation of dread or hopeless. Maybe is the ponies, but just for me, it does not go with the theme of the contest. Still not bad.
-- poison_mara on 12/29/2020 6:08:51 PM with a score of 0
Better than I thought it would be. It has quite a few typos and stuff. The life eating tree peeps were cool.

I think I failed due to murdering people or something lol
-- corgi213 on 12/24/2020 10:04:19 PM with a score of 0
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