You'd better hide...

Player Rating3.35/8

"#471 overall, #46 for 2006"
based on 132 ratings since 02/04/2007
played 1,506 times (finished 168)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

A primates Adventure         

A man lies dead in the forest, and you weep on the rock where he met his fate, his blood still fresh on your hands. Why would such a thing happen? You know that they haven't noticed that he's missing now, but just you wait.

 You'd

         better

                   Hide.

Keep your eyes open to just about every item that comes. You'll need most of them. I'll reward the user that wins this game with untold riches that no one would guess. It's very hard. So don't say I didn't warn you.

Player Comments

This just wasn’t very good. Making fun of the person’s name by the author really didn’t seem to serve any purpose in the story, so it just took the reader out of the story. The “insert your name here” also really didn’t add anything at all, so why bother including it? There’s no options on the first four pages. There’s not a big break between any of them, so all that information could just be put all together on a single page. And then, on page two, I get mad at my friend and decide to kill him. That’s not really reasonable. But I choke him to death, which somehow leaves me covered in blood. I’m not sure about the authors here, but last time I choked someone to death, there was no blood at all on me.

But then the last paragraph on that page is where it really starts going downhill. For some reason the police will be there in a couple days. Not today, not tomorrow, but definitely in a couple days. What, is there a regular patrol through that section of the woods, but only every three days? And I just happened to hit it right to get the full two days before they show up? And what’s with the sentence: “If they see his body here, they’ll know he’s dead.” Well, if that’s not the most useless sentence of all…of course they’re going to know he’s dead, because he is dead! And then, in that two days when they look down and see the body, the police are immediately going to say, “Oh yeah, two days ago, insert your name here went into the woods with this guy.” But wait, there’s more! In two days, when those police arrive, and they somehow know that you were the last person here, you’re apparently still going to have blood all over your hands from choking the guy! Have you ever heard of soap? Or are you supposed to be on a three-day washing cycle that happens to match the police patrol of the woods?

There’s plenty of other issues with items, links, and limited text and descriptions, but that page was so difficult to read and understand that I really didn’t read much more. This really needs a lot of work to be a quality story game.
-- Ogre11 on 7/8/2018 7:17:06 PM with a score of 1
Pretty bad, i'm sorry to say.

The first issue I noticed was the effort put into this. Judging from the length and the few sentences on most pages, you obviously didn't spend a lot of time on this.

The length of course isn't the only problem. There was also a huge lack of quality. The first page was decently written, but then the rest seemed extremely random, illogical, and undetailed.

Most situations seemed to randomly happen for plot convenience, and a lot of the choices are very illogical.

Very, very sloppily written no doubt, with almost no character development, extremely limited detail, and a very confusing and random plot that's introduced and put into action with almost no description of why.

Overall, I feel like this could have been written in about thirty minutes. You need to work a lot harder when writing storygames, because this obviously had very little effort put into it :(

1/8.
-- MinnieKing on 6/29/2017 6:48:50 PM with a score of 0
It was kinda short, but i enjoyed it!
-- StarReider on 9/27/2017 10:42:37 AM with a score of 2
I don't see any way to win. ?
-- Quorrah on 2/26/2017 9:47:25 PM with a score of 0
Lol I got smuggled into another country
-- CeruleanFlare on 12/19/2016 9:09:00 AM with a score of 2
I guess I got the best ending text read: Be a good ol' boy in your new country. Peace out
-- CowBoySkinnyLinny on 12/11/2016 4:40:07 PM with a score of 2
cool
-- Voltage on 11/29/2016 7:00:39 PM with a score of 1
got it.final line"be a good boy in your new country"
-- epix on 10/13/2016 6:22:47 PM with a score of 2
It's certainly better than anything I could do and I got a pretty good ending. Plus, the name of the last shop mentioned cracked me up. Wonderful work!
-- MysteriousShad27 on 3/19/2016 7:51:05 PM with a score of 2
I made it
-- corgi213 on 9/20/2015 9:26:13 AM with a score of 2
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