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So hey, it's up if you'd desire to give it a read. Yes, I'm quite sure it could have been longer, but it is what it is. Any other comments or suggestions, and I'd love to hear them (even if your comment is: "it sucks" because then at least I know you read it).

I'll edit this as I find more errors. Tell me if you have it fixed and I'll take it off the list.

Ending #3

You put 'hear to toe' when I believe you meant 'head to toe'.

Dang it! Thanks for pointing that out. I hate to unpublish and lose the ratings, saves, and such, but I guess that's the only way to fix stuff, right?

Mostly you lose the saves.  I unpublished/republished a story this year, and it didn't seem to delete all the ratings.

Ah, cool, thanks. I unpublished and fixed the typo, sorry to anyone who had a save in there! (And yes, the ratings appeared to stay, even though I got a note during the unpublishing that said they'd go away).

Just short, that's  all.

Thanks for the comment -- I think there was more story there to be told, but I also wanted to wrap this one up and not continue working on it for a year...

Really, all you need to do is add little branches to your current ends, such as getting locked in cryo-vats or angering your happy little spaceship friends so they end up killing you for the lolz.  I meant there was a lack of closure to some endings.

Really like what you did with the HTML though.

Thanks again for the feedback. Indeed, I get what you're saying. Especially with the branches that led to the pods, I really felt like there was more story -- but I was afraid if I just kept going, there would never be an end, ever. That's how I usually write -- just keep writing until the story ends itself. But I'm not sure that works with CYS stories. I think for my next one I'm going to do more planning ahead of time to see if that makes it easier to reach closure!

Thanks again.

Bumping this thread up for shameless promotion purposes.

It just doesn't get any better than shameless!  XD