Cat's Day

A warning. I am going to start bitching about a lot of things, that have to do with what a cat does.

Normally, a stereotypical cat wouldn’t be going around chasing squirrels. That is something the stereotypical dog does. Now, I am not saying that not something that a cat may do, but as a cat person, I can tell you that that is not what most cats do.

Now actual constructive criticism: One of your first choices was to eat and drink, without the owner being awake. Maybe you should go into the variables and mess around with that to make sure you only can eat and/or drink after the owner is up. Secondly, your story was short. Extremely short. A little descriptive writing would be nice, but still was very rushed. Third, your grammar could use a lot of work. And don’t be shy to ask for help! There are a lot of people you can PM that would help you fix your grammar. Overall, a 3/8.

This is another nice little story, but it really needs a little proofreading. There are a number of different errors on the first page including word use, typographic errors, and tense errors. I do like that there are choices in the story, though the first page might be labeled something other than “The First Page,” especially since there’s an option to go there in the story itself. The your vs you’re error shows up more than once as well throughout the story. That’s a painful error to read.

The story itself has lots of potential and is a neat little story. I like the options that you have as a cat, they make sense and are fun. Yes, they do all lead to the same ending, and that makes for quite a short little story, but it still works, generally. I just think each page could be enhanced with a few more details about what your cat is seeing and doing. There could be a lot more information about everything from the smell of the other cats to the chase of the squirrel. A nice little story, though, thank you for sharing it with the site.

I liked it, but it wasn't the best.

The writing was pretty good, but it wasn't very well fleshed out due to a lack of detail and branching. It was very short, and I think there were about two actual "choices" that led to another page, but I suppose that's what i'd expect since it has one ending.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors, such as "til" instead of "till." Errors like this make me feel like this was really lazy since it was so short, and a story as short as this should be easy to proofread.

It was cute in a way, but the emotion really didn't hit me until the last page, which seemed to have a lot of effort put in while other pages seemed written very quickly.

It feels like it was written in a day, honestly. I guess it's not easy writing a very long story about a cats home life, but that's just an opportunity for you to be creative! :D

3/8.

it was pretty good but short

Can yuo make a seqle

The cat just gives up no matter what. You are a sad person whoever made this.

It was an alright game and it was a short fun game.

Bad

I love this book

A story this short has only one excuse to have such bad grammar. I understand it if English is a second language. Otherwise this is terribly rushed through and wasn't looked over at all before it was published. This is a writing site for god's sake. Improve!