Choose Your Own Misadventure

This could have been a very fun story. Unfortunately, the structural issues were just a bit too much for me to really enjoy it.

The writing itself isn’t bad. It starts off with the classic stay in bed vs get out of bed, and while the story is pretty much mundane morning activities of a slob, it is narrated humorously enough to not be a drag.
I like this line in particular: “Overnight the beer monkey has sandpapered your mouth with crushed sloe berries.”
The text for the choice links were often pretty funny, and I thought some of the endings were amusing as well. I liked death by kebab especially.

It is cool to see the imitation of actual CYOA books in style. Next time using a font such as Times New Roman would probably help to really bring home that effect. Also, there is a lot of space in between lines, which makes the pages seem so empty and sparse, since the paragraphs are not long. I usually like to read stuff that is a bit spread out, but this was just too much sometimes, considering so little was on the pages to begin with.


Now for story structure, where my biggest complaints lie. I do not appreciate being required to choose a choice based off what I remember my previous choices. In fact, I am quite irritated by it. I shouldn’t have the other option if my previous actions lead to only one. Some coding or a bit less reliance on rejoining of branches would have fixed that problem, but as it was, it irritated me greatly.
There was also too much re-joining of branches for my taste. I would have preferred some of the effort put into making all the different meaningless choices to go into adding more actual branching.

There were some inconsistencies too. On one page it says that I smashed my phone, even though I had not done so, and somehow I greeted the landlord and peeps in only my underwear despite it being explicitly mentioned I had gotten dressed when I answered the door.

This would have been pretty amusing, were it not for the laziness on the part of the author when it came to choices, but I cannot recommend it as it is.

3/8
In my opinion, this game seemed good in theory, but not when you actually play it. A lot of random paragraphs mashed together. The idea is still good, though.

I would rate it better.. maybe a 2 if you could send more messages

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Pretty fun! I like how it's written out like choose your own adventure stories!

the game is quite simple, kind of easy. i like the feeling of being able to simply make choices, and the game gives off a very wide variety of basically that. however, i didn't really like how 'i apparently ran out and locked the door behind me, locking the guests in' was not a choice.

this is one of those simple story games I really enjoy.

Worst book ever!

It is... strange. It is nicely refreshing after really long paragraphs of lameness which most storygames are.

It is very, very short, of course, but there aren't many mistakes.

... that was different. I like it!

I only read this once. I won't read it again to see how else this could have gone. But it was a really pointless story if you ask me. It was also really short.