His Little Secret

A love & dating storygame by dark_baudelaire

Player Rating4.37/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 12 ratings since
Played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"Walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"

Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably be between PG-13 and R.

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I posted this a while back on my QuoteV. I never finished this, and I know it's not very good but I still hope it can be enjoyable for people to read.

You are shy, quiet, and sweet. You are the type of person nobody at school really ever takes any notice of.You are dating Brody, who is very attractive and popular at school.You love him. The problem is, he wants to keep your relationship a secret and he doesn't treat you like you would want a boyfriend to treat you. You have a habit of letting him get his own way. So, will you be able to make him change? Will you be stuck wrapped around his little finger? Will you meet another guy? Find out here...

CAST:

Beau Mirchoff as Brody.

Michael Cera as Scott.

Lucy Hale as Stacy.

DISCLAIMER: This is purely a work of fiction and not related to real people in any way.

Player Comments

Thank you so much for your comment. I really appreciate your constructive criticism, it's made me think more about how to change future stories for the better. You made some great suggestions that I am going to take on board :) @Allusional

— dark_baudelaire on 4/21/2014 12:57:48 PM with a score of 0

How about putting some of the background information in the story itself? Don't get me wrong, it's a nice plot, but the reader can't always rely on the description alone to tell them about the game. Start the game off at an easy walking pace before jumping into the action. The story would be better if you make the choice links short so the reader WON'T know what will happen next--it keeps the reader interested. Be sure to mix up the links too, because it seems like the top links are the "stay with him" choice and the bottom links are the "stay away" choices. The endings are also rather unsatisfying, because it's almost like a cliffhanger.

However, the writing flows easily and the characters were well-developed. The reader can feel some empathy for the protagonist and the other characters--depending on what they choose. It is nice that is has many endings and it is interesting to find them all. I look forward to reading more of your work!

— Allusional on 4/18/2014 2:37:16 PM with a score of 0

Oh, I'm sorry to hear that you thought it was weird @ Loudleaf. Thanks for playing anyway.