Player Comments on Julia

Of all the things I thought would happen in a story titled "Julia," getting sexually assaulted by Heisenberg was the last among them. I imagine during the rape he said, "Say my name!" while wearing a cool looking pork pie hat. Maybe even, "I am the one who knocks!" whilst, well, knocking her.

For a moment I thought this might have been written by a child, but then there was a Prince reference, so I'm doubtful.

What I will say with respect to the good of this story is that the author obviously cared enough to put in images, and there is a path that is more than two pages long. As far as the plot itself, or the prose, it all depends on what you're looking for. For example, some people absolutely love "Lawrence of Arabia," but some criticize it for being too long. Others swear by "The Room," citing its charm and unique dialogue. This story is more like the latter. If translated to the big screen, this story may rival it in its unsurpassed uniqueness.

Unfortunately, this masterpiece ends swiftly unless you choose to go on a date with a boy immediately after nearly being raped (assuming you wisely choose to beat on the lockers to outfox the wily meth dealer). If you do, the story continues for several more pages. You'll get to see riveting dialogue, such as:

"I have to worry, I am responsible for your safety now, since Grandma died three months ago, and our parents died in a car accident when we were young. I know I'm only 4 years older than you, but now I feel like I'm 20 years older. You mean the world to mean, Julia."

The ability to squeeze so much completely natural exposition into the dialogue that the other character clearly had no way of knowing is something only a master would be able to accomplish.

The author even did something few others would dare: flagrantly breaking the fourth wall AND pointing it out, so it's almost like breaking the fourth wall TWICE: "They arrived home after the twenty-minute car ride. John returned to work while Julia relaxed by taking a long bath, listening to music, and watching reruns of her favorite show, Breaking Bad (To be honest, I have only seen one episode, and it was pretty good. Don't know why I'm making so many references #Breakingthe4thWallBad)." Such courage. Such deft skill.

Should you continue, and you reach the true ending, you will find that the protagonist dies a swift and brutal death, whilst her brother is sentenced to prison and raped—but of course, it seems he considers this a just reward for getting his sister killed. In this sense, our author has borrowed from George R.R. Martin, crushing the reader's hopes with pure sorrow.

As it is the "True Ending," I will consider this to be a tragedy. All John wanted was to protect his sister, but his pride and overzealousness with respect to that charge led to her death, and getting ass-ramed in prison. In my head cannon, it was Walter White himself that did the raping. A kind of dark irony, since ol' Heisenberg was denied John's sister.

Years later, John visits the site and builds a memorial for her. John becomes an anti-drunk drinking advocate and spends his days longing for forgiveness. A sad, bitter ending, but a lifetime lesson learned.

If that is too dark for you, of course, there are numerous sort-of happy endings, including one where Julia has a baby and grows up (although she has no idea who the father is).

Overall, my honest take is that this story is not very good. It has poor prose, and some ludicrous events. However, it at least carries a fairly depressing ending and has numerous branches if you can get past the first Dark Souls boss, which is an aroused Walter White ready to show you a side of exothermic reactions you never would have thought possible.

I recommend you read this just to see what the bottom barrel of ratings look like. Last thing I'll say: this may be one of the stories rated a 3 (and thus among the worst rated available), but it is NOT actually the worst story.

Happy reading!

Sometimes a game makes you think about life, the universe and your perception of reality. This is not one of those games. The game starts with a character from breaking bad trying to rape the main character, but failing. Somehow it goes even further downhill from here.

I’m not here to insult anyone’s grammar, I mean mine definitely isn’t the best, but the plethora of spelling mistakes in this piece make me think the author didn’t spell check at all before posting. Very occasionally I skipped ahead because the sentence I was on was frankly unreadable.
Spell checking is very important.

Another problem with the game is that none of my choices seemed to make any difference to what was going on, despite their being a lot of endings I still felt incredibly railroaded which was definitely somewhat upsetting.

The one thing the game does well is that it seems to have been written satirically: if you hope and pray it’s written in this manner it’s just about bearable.

Jokes aside, this is a good try but could really benefit from looking over the minimum requirements for story games on the site. Also, what was the pen item for at the start of the game? I couldn’t find a use for it and I put myself through this multiple times.

I mean, it's not terrible. Had a decent length to it.
Unfortunately for the author I just couldn't take the story seriously. Apparently, Julia gets raped by Brian Cranston and potentially turns into Alan from Two And A Half Men XD)

"10 years later, Julia, now a famous chiropractor, meets Emile at a grocery store. It turns out that Emile, who couldn't find a girl, decided to turn gay. He was with his "life partner", Jon, his best friend in high school. They were both famous Youtube gamers after learning video editing in college. Julia, who was still single, bumped into a girl named Anna after meeting Emile and Jon, and she was a stone cold fox. Everything about her screamed "Red Hot!" and after seeing how well Emile was doing being gay, she contemplated going down the same path... Sorry! The rest of this I'm not going over, it's too weird! You can imagine it yourself, or write what Julia does next, it's create your own ending!. Nevertheless, congratulations! You found the weird ending! Try to find the others!"

Hee hee... the weird is the BESST ending! ;D

Ehh more or less ok

It was ok.....

i got the best ending1 woot woot! (the story said it was the best ending)

Lol, I had them argue every chance I could. Somehow won.

That's a messed up story.

Well, I became fully NAKED hanging from a fan, with no apparent item to stand on and tip over to hang myself, and the cops think that a naked girl hanging from a fan is a suicide. Such dumbass cops.

Grammar errors were annoying, but at least you're getting out there and giving it a go

Short, but what was with the pen?

:O... So, I thought if in the beginning I used the pen, I would be able to stab him... Looks like I was wrong because it only got me hanged...

REALLY COOL <--ROFL -->

I found 'em all.

BDP, I'd unpublish it to fix the grammar errors.

Correcting some grammatical errors in the story: WARNING! Potential spoiler alerts (YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED!)







1. In the second ending, "ove" should be "over"
2. When John brings home groceries "you savior" should be "your savior"
3. During Dinner "less than accurate" should be "less than adequate"
4. On the page "Tension", "visible" should be "visibly".

These are the errors I found, there might be more, but hopefully this will clear up a little confusion. Sorry!

Thanks mscrl180, appreciate the support!

This was a pretty fun Game. There were some typos but nothing I couldn't work through. All and All a good effort.

And thank you Malkalack for commenting and supporting my story!

A couple of things, the pen is used early on, and one of the endings is a little incomplete, because it is pretty weird. You can complete it using the comment section if you please!

I just got sexually abused by Walter White..

This is actually pretty good. Good job, mate!

There are multiple endings of both good and bad! Try to find them all!