Torch (an Unfinished Experiment)
A
family friendly
storygame by
Trish
Player Rating
?/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Based on 7 ratings so far
Story Difficulty
1/8
"No possible way to lose"
Play Length
4/8
"A well spent lunch break"
Maturity Level
5/8
"Aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
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You can play this, if you want - it's short, but there's temporary "end game" links lying around in it. In this game, you're a castle torch living out your days in the murky depths. It's basically a test to see if I can actually write an alright storygame with this concept.
Player Comments
Just wanted to say that I think the reason you've gotten a 4 so far isn't because of any flaws in the story but just because the game is unfinished. :)
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Briar_Rose
on 11/23/2012 6:28:28 PM with a score of 0
I like it! It's weird yet entertaining. Where can you go from there I don’t know, but I'd definitely like to find out!
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BerkaZerka
on 11/23/2012 6:21:43 PM with a score of 0
Cool beans. Again, thank you for commenting! Now I need to meditate on how exactly I'm going to put supernatural elements in. I'll take this down later today, fix at least one typo, and continue writing. One more thing, though: none of these comments are scathing, so how'd I get a 4? It doesn't matter greatly since I'm going to un-publish this anyway, but still. Bah.
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Trish
on 11/23/2012 4:37:25 PM with a score of 0
@Briar, Something like Howl's Moving Castle's fire spirit? could lead to a twist of somebody eating you for power i guess.
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Fireplay
on 11/23/2012 10:46:02 AM with a score of 0
I've got to say, when I read "Finally, a game in which the only things you can do are burn and more burn" I was thinking... "Oh dear." That said, I was pleasantly surprised. The writing was good and strangely enough I found the story pretty interesting considering the main character was a flame. I definitely think a supernatural element to the story would help. Maybe if the flame in question was some kind of fire spirit. Something like Ariel, the spirit from Shakespeare's Tempest that loves causing mischief for mortals. That way the fire would have an actual personality and I'd be a lot more interested in the outcome of the story.
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Briar_Rose
on 11/22/2012 6:42:54 PM with a score of 0
I won't rate it until it's finished but i love the idea of being a torch/flame on a torch. The description, while a bit vauge was good and the small bits of story i could find got my attention.
So all in all good job, i hope you finish this soon.
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Fireplay
on 11/22/2012 6:33:59 PM with a score of 0
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