Player Comments on A Witch's Inheritance

Quite an impressive story. It's just the perfect blend of wonderful poise, and a dark rather oppressive narrative that kept me wanting to see more of what this story had to offer. I guess that I'm just the kind of reader that this story appeals to, I suppose? Because while there aren't a shortage of unfortunate events that our protagonist goes through, it's not like that's all that is there to this story.

Yes, not at all. I would say that there's value in taking the bad with the good in the story of the rather unlucky witch. It really made me want to rebel against some of the fates that can befall our protagonist, and reach whatever conclusion that was the most positive. Still, the conclusions that were more on the bleak side remained with remarkable quality of writing.

Mynoris has a way of drawing a reader in with their words, and then immersing them in the happenings of the particular world that the story-game takes place in. There's plenty of directions that are available for the reader to take, and each has their own little surprise and major differences in story, depending on the reader's choice. That in my opinion, is what makes a very enjoyable story.

A Witch's Inheritance is a remarkable dark fantasy story. It's not afraid to put its protagonist through some rather distressing scenarios, and it doesn’t shy away from that fact. All the while, maintaining a high quality of writing across each page, to each conclusion.

This is good work by the writer, Mynoris. I certainly have no hesitations of recommending this as a worthwhile read.

Wasn’t quite sure what to expect from you initially. It was little surprising that you picked the witch whore topic, but you did and made it work for you.

The writing was consistently good. You described everything pretty well. The protagonist was fleshed out along with the various characters she meets in the various branches which you also had enough of for the story not to be linear.

I know one of the complaints I’ve heard about this one is that it’s mostly a series of unfortunate events and the protagonist seems to be on the receiving end of continually getting kicked in the face.

While it’s probably the sadistic side of me (Which is all of me) that was one of the main reasons why I liked this story. Everything that happens is just one bad thing after another that I couldn’t help but laugh and enjoy! While that probably wasn’t your intention, that doesn’t matter, I liked what you wrote for my reasons.

And besides all that, there are a few paths where she does okay, so its not all bad.

It was a real shame that you didn’t finish this one in time for the contest because this probably would have gotten at least third place from me.

Looks like a good intro and description of the story. I am always at least slightly put off when I read that the author “ran out of time.” I understand that may have been the case for a contest entry, but the author can always take the story down after the contest is over and finish it. I have seen many authors take that route. Either that, or simply live with what’s published, make it a complete story, and leave that line out.

I like the first page and the start of the story. I like the italics showing me that this is the past and setup for the story. I really like that I have a number of options on the first page as well. From a quick glance there, it looks like these options really have huge effects on the story, which is really great! Of course, because of those varied options, there appear to be a number of ways to end the story really quickly. I do appreciate the options and that they don’t lead back to one another with no effect, but some of the endings really do appear almost too soon.

I like the writing and the story. There are lots of good ideas in here, and I really like all the branching. Some of the pages are longer and have good dialogue and descriptions in them. I find it interesting that almost all of the endings allow me to restart, except the Peaceful ending. Nicely done, I do encourage you to write more, whether it is with this story or another!

I first got an unhappy ending at some school for bad kids, then a happy one with an adoptive family. So well done in the since of various endings. Could be a bit longer though. Overall was an enjoyable tale.

This was super well written and I really enjoyed it. Some of the choices didn't go where I expected them to, but in such cases I'd just restart the story and play again. I would recommend this.

Lovely story about how an unlucky witch protagonist can progress in life.

that way very good my friend

This was amazing! Every single sentence was written with delicacy and pleasure! It's like a spider creating a web slowly until it's perfect! The happy endings were quite beautiful overall!

This was the best! I loved how everything was told and wrote in a special and delicate way! Each sentence seemed like a spider building its web with beauty! There was much detail to it and enough to make you create an image in your head. The happy endings were quite beautiful overall! You've done great!

Seem like every decision will lead to the story ending.

I don't know if on purpose but somehow there are some familiar stories reference. Like the girl with matches. I know a story such as that. Maybe I am looking too much into it.

nice job, i enjoyed the story and i thought the choices you listed were good.

It was really good and was very descriptive

Wow, just wow. That was pretty good although I didn't see too much in the witch's story.

Awsome

Amazing could use more detail

I don't have much to say, other than that was a really great experience! I love how everything is so well explained, and each ending gets you a different sort of satisfaction.

ok, so honestly it was a bit long. i dont think long works well for screens.

I found it to be very detailed. I was disappointed that no matter what choices were made the poor girl never seemed truly happy, and I was very disappointed that her power "spoiler" turned out to be sleeping with men that she doesn't even care about so that she can steal their energy and have them obsessed with her. I really think that would be more of a curse than a power. I did find one happy ending the first time I read through and I suppose that maybe after that one I should have left it alone. However it did mention that she never learned about her mother and so I thought reading that one would have a happier ending, it didn't.

The idea is a great one, and i enjoyed the characters of the various storylines. However, it seems quite rushed with a lot of very quick endings and then the winning ending that seems as though it glazes over what could have been a fantastic story with lots of personalised choices. I think you should work on expanding the story from the swamp onwards and perhaps even a few of those rather quick ends at the beginning could be fleshed out, to not be so sudden.

...even in the best possible ending, it still seems like such a sad story. Still, it is definitely worth a read through, seeing how it is so exquisitely written a tale

surprising twist at the end. :)

nice job. i finished it and it was great.

I liked it he was slightly a bad role model for younger readers though

wish it were longer

Well written, it could have had more to it. I'm assuming the victory in death ending is the main path of the story, which wasn't as long as it could have been. There could have been more branches and decisions during the witch training, which could have made it more interesting.
All in all it was a great story though, and I hope to see more from you.

Might as well just write a damn book cause I felt like there were no choices.

this will be the first story i will have ever commented on, all i will say is good job and i liked it.

Two words: It Good.

This is a very well written game, with very few grammatical errors or typos. The story is nice, although short. You didn't developed the characters that much but it wasn't necessary for the story to be entertaining.

I've played every segment of the story and I think some paths could've been a little longer, but you gave enough branching to the story for it not to be a problem. Still, the "anger" path could've been better.

All in all, I enjoyed the game more than I thought I would as I stumbled upon it by accident, so it was a nice surprise. I hope you make more stories.

This was fantastic. I was waiting so long for this story-game to be published, and I'm not disappointed with the results at all. The length, amount of text on each page and the lack of grammatical errors really made my day.

Well done.