Player Comments on Adventures of a Cute Cat: A Poem

You lied to me Negative! At the beginning of the poem, you stated that the cat barked instead of meowing, but later on in the poem, there's a verse that mentions the cat meowing! This game forged of trickery and deceit I tell you!!!

... With that out of the way, it was cute. I thought it was fun that the game was written in the form of a poem, though some of the rhymes did seem a little forced to me, (like the bit where she didn't want change in her life because it would be like walking on a knife. There are other words that rhyme with life you know?) :p

I love poems!!!

IT WAS NOT AS GOOD LIKE I THOUGHT AND I HAVE MADE 20 CREATE UR OWN STORYS

i love this game 10/10

My mom is my mom.

this is way better than homework

This poem was very funny and made me laugh a little.

it was cool

Good, I like that allowed you to choose what you wanted.

It was fun

My story was cool.

fun to play

There was indeed a cute cat.

love it! :3

Got the pull out ur claws ending

It lasted for about two minutes. Awful??

Very cute.

This story is cute, funny and fantastic!

:3 cute cat

I LOVE IT

"Face the dreaded pirate
His face was terrifying,
his filthy beard tangled like a nest,
his voice was like thunder,
proclaiming he was the best,

He challenged her to a game,
of wits, brawn and not pain,
her prize would be glorious,
for it was freedom she would gain,

After sometime,
there he was lying,
sprawled in his tears,
having lost not once, but a dozen times,

He jumped off the ship,
not in pride but in shame,
promising he would return,
till then she could be the captian of his Queen Ann,
and so she became the queen,
of a crew and a Queen!

The End"

uH... AM i missing something? ;)

Briar-Rose, it's a game of time-travel and alternate universes, in one she would bark, but another she would meow. Alternate universes work like that, one the evil ambitious magic old-person likes dragons and in the alternate universe she hates them! I played again just to explain this to you (hope it helps).

It was funny and entertaining, though not my style so I can't really rate it well, it's also very original! Never seen another like it I give it about a five.

It was fun. Funny and some else put "Ambitious" I think that suits it. I would like to see more.

Lovely, just lovely. It oddly reminds me of Cut the Rope: Time Travel. I'm a sucker for poems.

For goodness sake,
I counted a few spelling mistakes,
But overall not too bad,
All you gotta do is keep trying lad.

Actually I don't know what to say. I just can't guess what made you write this. But I'm not taking away it's cuteness.

short and cute... :3

it was awesome!i really liked it!id also like to see more of your storygames!

The idea is certainly novel and ambitious, even if the execution leaves something more to be desired. There aren't really any rules to poetry, but for something like this, some tweaking to make the verses sound more natural rather than shoehorned in would have helped.

Also, it was still too short to really be a storygame, even if it is understandable that the format makes it more forgiveable.

Nice.

Entertaining. Short and sweet.

... I'm beginning to think I should start charging folks for unauthorized cameos. ;) (Kidding, the only one I ever really minded was by a certain Spiderman fanboy.) While this combines two lovable things, cats and poetry, I can't rate it very high.

The flow is too awkward. It's not enough to just make the last word of a sentence match up with the last word of another sentence. I've written a lot of rhyming poetry, and its ability to roll off the tongue naturally and keep a consistent rhythm is its true charm.

To accomplish that and make most of a minimalistic form of expression like poetry, careful word selection (quality and quantity) is so, so important. You had extra words where they weren't needed, but in other places, they were sorely missed, and some parts just could've been phrased better. I also noted a few general mistakes. (Like spelling "anger" as "angre")

The content of the poetry is kinda random, which I don't normally find too compelling unless it's very funny or very, very creative.

The length of my play through was acceptable given the format, though you abandoned your rhyme-scheme a bit jarringly less than halfway through the last page of that one. I think you may have gotten caught up in telling the story instead of writing a poem--which, we are here for a story, but if you're going to make a gimmick the main feature _of_ a story, I'd strongly recommend consistency. And if you can't multitask with enough effort given to both, I'd recommend just telling the story straightforward.

That said, I am not calling this bad. It's better than about half the games I've subjected myself to on here, but I'm very fond of poetry and thus, very critical of it. I'd recommend reading/re-reading works like "The Raven" when studying flow--personally, I can't read it without wanting to read aloud because of its rhythm.

Strange ending, but I liked it, but I felt it could have been better. 4/8

Very Clever and very good :D

On the plus side, it was cute and I liked the fact that it rhymed rather than one of those shitty, non-rhyming poems. On the negative side, I hate cats. Hehe. Negative, because your name is... ah, you get it.

Hmm, not that bad...

I actually liked this game quite a bit. It was refreshing in the sense that it was poetry, and the story was fine. I only have two questions. Why was "warrior" underlined? Why was a barking cat meowing?

How is it rated 3 times when it has only been played twice? This game is cursed! Run!