Adventures of a Normal Man

This game is actually pretty good, despite having numerous errors.

Here's a tip of advice for you, let someone else proofread this game for you. If you're not good at English, it's alright. Still, each story has to be revised for quality, and you can ask for help from the wonderful members on this site for help.

Onto my review!

This game is a nice attempt for your first game, even though it suffers from errors. Your use of the advanced editor seems proficient enough, but you need more experience, particularly in scripting. You can exploit the game and get some things for free, without the necessary items to get them.

Your use of humor seems to be fine, although it's still random and randomness usually doesn't work in stories. This story is no exception, as there was an instance where if you don't follow the narrator, you get killed by random reasons.

The problem is... although this story was of decent length, it ended abruptly. That makes this storygame a part 1 or a demo essentially, but it seems complete enough to not be qualified as an incomplete game.

If you were to make a part 2, make sure it's proofread for quality and is complete. There is a path I took that is incomplete, which is the Fine path, and I hope that you complete it.

My rating is 4 for fine.

The fact that English is not your native language is quite clear. "After all, you told him that when he suggested you to girlfriend Casey." <--huh? Also, tommorow is the incorrect spelling of tomorrow. There are many grammar mistakes, and they did disrupt my reading of the storygame a little.

I applaud you. You managed to put humor and game and story (well, that lacked a little) and decent writing skills together to form a good storygame!

But. That was basically a demo. No demos please. It ended too soon, even though the story was of medium length... Now I want to read the next part!!!

A solid 3/8.

I think I played a version of this a while ago, maybe a before version because I didn't remember any of the adulthood, but I did remember the childhood. Or I just didn't finish it. Anyways, it was good game, just wish we got a bit more closure on the endings.

path in Nodnol is too short

I will praise its humour

What an amazing game, I gave it an 8/8 and praiseed it's amazing humour.

This story was pretty good, aside from the numerous grammar errors. I probably rated this more than I should have but, 5/8.

This was pretty good. Pretty underrated if you ask me. I like the humor in it. The long description on the stick was amusing. Wish the author was still around. Curuois what he could have made.

good