Player Comments on Alien Hunter
While I found the story to be enjoyable in a quaint sort of way, there were quite a lot of errors in spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Most of the endings don't even have an end game link - in fact, I think only one of them does - and that's never great. Make sure to add end game links at every ending, so that people can actually leave a score. Plus, the one ending that DID have an end game link doesn't even seem to be the 'true ending', if that makes sense.
As for what I did like, the use of description was decent, it really made me <i>feel</i> like a seclusive, financially-struggling millennial (what else is new). The branching was quite good too: I was expecting the "don't investigate" option on the first page to just lead to a dead end, but instead there were actually a few choices after that, which was a pleasant surprise. I love how telling the truth to the police solicits a bad ending, too. There's something funny about that.
Unfortunately, the aforementioned poor grammar is probably going to lower scores, as it has lowered mine. It's good practice to read over your stories before publishing them, to make sure that everything reads well. I mean, there's even a spelling mistake in the game's description ("which" should be "wish"), which leaves a bad first impression.
Anyway, good use of images, somewhat enjoyable story, decent-ish branching, but let down by poor SPaG and the lack of end game links. I doubt this story will get a rating above 3.
on 6/8/2022 10:49:42 AM with a score of 0
The story was good in idea, but I was kind of thrown off by the spelling mistakes. A multitude of them. I also didn't like how you couldn't end the game after every ending. Meh overall
on 8/12/2022 2:02:39 PM with a score of 0
Yeah, I was about to give it a 4 out of 8, because it was a half decent read, but God please, just put an ending link for at least the normal endings.
on 7/4/2022 8:24:05 AM with a score of 0
Felt like a blast from the past. Reminded me of the storygames I farmed through from the 2000s for juicy points.
on 7/2/2022 12:01:38 PM with a score of 0
Alien Hunter is alright in some areas but could use some work in others. The spelling, tenses, and the general sentence structure/flow need some serious proofreading.
I was hoping for a little more intrigue from the alien-focused side of the story, but the story that's there is fine. My favorite ending is actually on the other side, where you take your phone into the sewers with you when your neighbors mob your house and just spend the rest of your days there lol. Kind of a fucked up neighborhood and world this is that you've created.
on 6/8/2022 6:54:43 PM with a score of 0