Player Comments on Antedilluvia

For someone who has had a seemingly depressing life of poverty before his decision to leave Rauras (sorry for any misspellings of names), it doesn't seem reasonable for the protagonist to be anywhere near Mundus' skill level in swordsmanship, and even if the protagonist had a background that allowed it, it should have been mentioned.

There were a few grammar issues I caught, but it didn't interfere with the story. Sadly, the story is very linear and short, which was disappointing, but the experiences with each person was sweet, almost bittersweet, with the tone you set earlier in the story.

The pictures are beautiful and definitely helped create an atmosphere for the storygame. Expand the plot more, add paths, keep doing what you've been doing (I understand the process is slow for you.) and you'll have a great storygame!

As much as I wish it weren't, this story is obviously linear. This storygame has so much potential for becoming an excellent read, if only the author would finish it and give it branches. There's no point in utilizing the medium of the CYOA if you're only going to write linear fiction within it. This storygame (and it's author) have lots of potential but it's being wasted by not writing interactive fiction.

This was a great start to a story. You mentioned that it was going to be part of a series so I do hope you write the rest.

The main point I would raise apart from the length is that it is more story than 'Choose your Own' however you do warn people about this.

There is not rly a plot, it's just hanging out with friends, Fion is fun tho

this was pretty good, but it needs more branching. If it had more branching, I can see this easily becoming a very good CYOA, but for now it is just a linear story.

This game had a lot of choices. Wouldn't exactly call it branching since they all lead to the same thing, but it was intresting to say the least.

As a result of the amount of pages, they are all pretty short. Not too much of a problem though, and i enjoyed this story as well as the writing in it.

Sweet

I wish that the choices you make influenced the story that would have been awesome

Did you... or can you make another one?

Should have made it longer, I was just getting into the flow of the story when it abruptly ended.

it is a good game you should do more

Fun. :) Ty 4 the storygame!

This was an easy story to follow, and I liked it, but it was to short. I hope that I see a second one!

I would HIGHLY prefer you finish this before I go crazy. I'm usually pretty patient, except for stories. I'm a professional at story-sucking. ; )

I really liked it

Good but it's bad for yourr readers to have a cliffhanger or ending like that and you don't even continue the story. Shameful. >.>

That was fun. Nice and lighthearted.

Short

While it's fairly well written, there's no purpose. There's no goal to reach or mission to complete. It's decent, but not terribly interesting. The world is nice but to make a world great, things have to happen to it.So far, it's just a bunch of character interactions and small competitions. I'd like to see more of a plot if/when you write another game. - 4/8

I enjoyed it even though it was quite linear.

Verry nice game!

That is an awesome story. I just you would be able to finish it.

This is alright as a story, but linear.

Hope to see you finish this up =)

Lovely writing style and intriguing plot. Totally deserves a sequel!

Thank you! A lovely read! Well written and thought out with a good message. Wonderful names, too! I hope you still enjoy writing and are sharing more of your talent with the world!

Really nice game! Make a part two and I will like it even more.

Pretty good can't wait for more

This was a really beautiful story. Definitely more "story" than "game" and it works.

I am honestly impressed it is a great plot and a great setting. You did a wonderful job creating engaging characters and really drawing the reader in.

Good, I liked the setting, the characters, and most of all... the grammar was almost flawless!

The two obvious drawbacks are that
1. It isn't finished :P
2. The choices (as you mentioned in the game description) didn't matter, and I like when my choices affect the outcome.

Overall, a good start, I hope to see this completed.