Player Comments on Harry Potter: The Last Riddle
I'll preface this by saying I've never been big on Harry Potter, and while I am aware of its more well known aspects and characters, I'm not too sure of some other details; as such I'll be rating this as any other storygame rather than how true it is to its source material.
The writing was good. There were a few spelling errors here and there I would try and fix. Story-wise, the setting is vividly pictured in good detail. It would've been nice to have a bit more atmosphere to fully immerse myself in this world, but I still found the descriptions being offered to be very clear and distinct. I feel like the characters made this world fall flat more - there is some variation in the characters and their personalities, but it doesn't fee enough to make them fully stand out from one another. There's not enough distinct characterization for me to really care about the individuals I come across.
Apart from that, the story was decent enough. The whole wand and House selection aspect was neat, even you can just ignore your assigned wand or House altogether and choose your own regardless of how you answered their corresponding questions. My biggest issue with this story is the ending: I feel like each ending could've been written in as a continuation instead of just being a blurb at the end of this one story. It would've been far more interesting to take us on the adventure being described rather than simply condense it into a few sentences and abruptly end it at that.
Overall, I think this is a decent storygame (and certainly one of the more well written Harry Potter fan fictions I've seen), and while I did have a good time playing through, I really do wish there was more to it - there is a whole lot of unused potential. 5/8.
on 4/14/2021 10:34:00 AM with a score of 1
A pretty well written and fun story, just a bit on the short side, which would be my only criticism.
on 7/15/2021 5:40:25 AM with a score of 0
This was quite a bit better than I expected. Good job.
on 6/14/2021 5:30:05 PM with a score of 0
— HermioneWitch on 6/3/2021 7:30:01 AM with a score of 0
this was so cool, thank you so much for taking the time to write it!!!
— L on 5/25/2021 1:57:10 AM with a score of 0
A well written story
on 5/12/2021 9:41:01 AM with a score of 0
This was quite fun and well written as fan fictions go and it's always nice to revisit the world of Harry Potter with a slightly different slant. The wand and house quizzes were neat, though I am not sure how much impact they had on the game and I think the whole story could be enlarged quite a lot with a lot more content. Overall this seemed a pretty good effort by an author who clearly enjoys his subject matter, good work :D
on 4/24/2021 7:10:52 AM with a score of 0
Made me Feel like a true first year student at Hogwarts! Loved every bit of detail you put into this story ugh soo good
on 4/14/2021 2:25:06 AM with a score of 1