Player Comments on I Am A Dragon

That was... Strange. Apparently humans are fireproof and getting disorientated results in dying of starvation. O.o

God damm it i had to play again to fix my grammar !
Thats it?

That's it's?

My guess is that maybe the human was wearing fire-proof armor? I can't decide on any rational reasons for his immunity!

Too short, not descriptive enough, bad grammar. I'd give you a 0 is I could, but sadly I can't. 1/8.

What is this shit? WHAT IS IT?

FIRE IMMUNE HUMANS TO BOOT WITH SOME OF THE WORST STORYTELLING IN RECENT MEMORY!

Where do you go?
>The Cave
There is a dragon there. Nooooo, you die.

That's pretty much half the "game". No, more. Like 3/4. or 5/8. Can't quite decide.

That coupled with no detail and more flawed logic (fire immune humans, as previously mentioned, and you, a baby dragon with minimal experience, being able to take down a whole team of dragons by "whacking them" and NOT being able to take down a SINGLE dragon trapped in a cave) makes this game not worth your time and something to be avoided.

Look, I'm sorry, but... wait, no I'm not. Un-publish this and rework it. Take more time, preferably more than 5 minutes, and add some meat to your game. It's great that your trying to start writing CYOA fiction, but it's NOT great that you think you can just post whatever you can throw together in 5 minutes.

Heck, if dragons aren't tickling your fancy any longer, try something new! Just make sure you have something of substance before you publish it.

Poor. I was hoping for something better than this.

This story was very poor, and it's a shame too, I really liked the opening.

I Am A Dragon follows the adventures (or misadventures) of a hatchling dragon as they spend their first days exploring a new land. The choices in this story vary from exploring new places to engaging in battles, and even choosing how you look. Sounds like a lot of fun, right? WRONG!

The amount of exploration in this story is just hideous. Every choice leads to a death scene or a game over. I played through the story twice, regrettably.

Please un-publish this story and work on it more. Add more details to the world. Add more descriptions of what places look like. Add more gravity to the choices. Give us some exploration!

I don't think humans would want to take on a dragon. And apparently humans are fire proof now?

There shouldn't be so many death options. I make a decision that's as good as any other, and then I die. Multiple times. If you're doing this because Endmaster does this, the difference is that his have a really good story to them.

The grammar and spelling here wasn't too bad, and it was understandable, but I'm getting the sense that you didn't put too much effort into this. There's room for a lot more improvement, from descriptions to pacing. Everything seemed to go very fast in this storygame, and if you stopped to flesh out the story more it would be much better. The concept is a bit cliche as well, so you should probably consider adding an original twist somewhere in there. It would make it that much more interesting and most likely up your ratings.

I gave this a 2/8 because though there is definite potential for you and it, the story game seemed like it was written an a few hours and that barely any work was put into it. I believe that you are capable of better though, and will look for your future work. :)

It's way too short, and there are way too many death options. Not every path should lead to death, man! I'm also not a huge fan of the fake choices, like what color you look like or where you go, and they don't actually matter at all.

How can a human be immune to fire?

1/8

The whole time I was playing this I was thinking "where is Donkey from Shrek" :) This is pretty short and simple.

Well that escalated quickly. I just met this dragon girl and we mate and have eggs immediately?

So, I just meet someone, they make up a ridiculous name for me, and we have dragon intercourse and start a family? The end?
Why can't I just make up my OWN name? I mean, Sparkles? What the actual fuck is wrong with that other dragon's mind? T_T

This story has a good concept but it might be a bit overused. It was kinda short and escalated really fast. Like I randomly meet someone and suddenly we become mates and have eggs? This needs some work, and I would highly encourage you to keep writing. Hope I helped:)

Not too bad, but there's kind of a "bare-bones" feel to this CYA. I'd like to see this story fleshed out a lot, and maybe add some extra options. There is definite potential here, but it's not quite there yet.

It seems like it could be better. Maybe if you made more than one ending in which you don't die or were able to live longer. Great idea overall.