Player Comments on Make the right choice

Sheesh

This is a little bit scary...

I had no other choice but to smoke, and then I got cut with a katana, and then 11 years later I was run over by a four wheeler

Umm.. did I just get smothered by a pillow… and die?

THAT COP CAN GO #### HIMSELF!!! HE NEEDS TO LEAVE!! Please play this game, they worked really hard on it, BUT THAT PSYCO COP CAN GO #### HIMSELF INTO LAVA AND GO TO TARTARUS FOR ALL I CARE!!!! *Pfffft the idiot. If that were me I would kick him in the balls.

umm pls no heck no the cops and the other part of that is creepy i do not like that 1 bit

I like it it really helped me understand lots of stuff thank you for making this it will help lots of people thank you again bye. :)

fuck that scary ass shit, im in my professors room trynna not to cry. fuck that cop too.

It was preatty good!

It’s a wonderful game! I hope you enjoy!

i got to 15

nice effort ^-^

not the best, kinda boring

This is a fricking terrible. I wanted something fun not stup*d for gods sake

bruh.... u could have like atleast put some effort into it

Not long enough

This game is doodoo ass cheeks

was looking for a make-your-own-story game.... and this one was surprisingly the only one available, so.. it helped me out!

This. game is great

I don't really understand how to criticized story like this, but I still can clearly see that there are some shortcomings in the story. I think it just need an improvement that's all.

this game was lame, i only made 1 damn choice. this was just weird asf.

I am Speechless. It was that amazing. Thank you.

More color, needs some pop, ilustrations

Very funny!

great!

It was great!

It is dumb that I died when I chose to sleep and was to comfy so i died

Nice story, full of suspence and fun.

xd i ran away and it was really my uncle wow then a refused to smoke i almost died but i lived wow XDDDD that was fun

This is good, I think I found a few spelling mistakes but other than that it is not a bad storyline! :)

so... there's a moral?

I WAS KILLED BY A POLICE OFFICER!!! OH MY GOD!!! THAT"S GRUESOME!!!

Very creatives! I liked that it was long and detailed and it had you choose your gender and name and stuffs. Yes, I meant to say stuffs.

STAY FAR, FAR AWAY! Almost every choice is illogical and seems to end in DEATH. It is extremely short. BOO!

its ok I guess its pretty short and kinda stupid

I just went through it again. It seems I was actually lucky, as I got the only branch that was even close to detailed and finished. Smothered by an overly-comfortable bed? Got into the wrong crowd and get overdosed? And just because I stayed home and didn't follow a guy I just met halfway across the world or decided to sleep and not explore a place I had never been to on my own. This is an even worse story than I thought. I am changing my score to a 1/8.

This game was almost completely atrocious. Almost every choice was illogical and badly created, and much of your grammar and spelling was bad. The story was way too short, random and barely thought out. I really think you should get rid of it or do some extreme damage control.

Your grammar on some pages seemed like you went to that page, couldn't be bothered making an effort, and just fluffed a page through so it was over and done with. Seriously? If you are making a story game, put the same effort into every page that you do with the first. And you should be putting a lot of effort into your first. Otherwise, people will take one look at the page, go, 'Wow, this has absolutely no effort', and quit playing. Or, they will keep playing, finish, and forget all about their horrific experience. Either way, you still need to make much more effort.

This game was extremely short. I clicked about 5 links and the game ended abruptly and randomly. I went from being in a park to eating dinner to being in Japan to skipping five years of my life. And then it ended. I don't know if I ended up choosing the shortest branch or if every branch was like this, but you still need to add much more. Plus, none of your pages had any detail whatsoever, and you really needed it considering the length of the game. I had a lot of trouble even finding the story of this game, it just seemed to skip randomly from plot to plot.

The game was completely random and illogical. So, we should get into a black unmarked van with a stranger and avoid police because they are axe murderers? Are you serious? Plus, the whole meeting your uncle in the streets for the first time and on that night inviting you to go to Japan with him is just insane. You must have been absolutely desperate because this was just weird. The story randomly jumped from weird scene to weird scene and I honestly think this is because you just got bored with a plot and moved onto the next. I could hardly tell if this story had any meaning or purpose behind it. And if this is for an assignment, you had better be hoping your teacher would take a bullet for you, because that's the only way they might even consider giving you a halfway decent mark.

This story is just horrible. Nothing made sense and it just looked like you couldn't be bothered trying or putting in even an ounce of effort. This game resembles a slobbering, bug-eyed, buck teethed mutant goldfish (and I sincerely apologise to the slobbering, bug-eyed, buck-teethes mutant goldfish out there for insulting you). You need to take this down and delete it forever. Or completely redo it, but if you have the attention span of a forgetful, clumsy, pinprick-brained bug like this story makes you out to have (again sorry to any of these reading this), then you probably will be unable to bring this story up to even a bearable standard. So please get rid of it as soon as you can. 2/8.

it is good

WHAT.......JUST.......HAPPENED.......

umm huh? i'm not saying it's bad but i'm confused

So, when confronted by a stranger who claims to be my uncle who wants to give you a ride in his van, you must trust him. Oh, and never trust the police because they are child molesters and murderers!

OH WAIT. THAT'S NOT HOW IT WORKS.

Random deaths everywhere, and bad morals abound. This needs to be a higher rating, like REALLY BAD.

what a junk... what you thinking when you wrote it?

baisicly go against all common sense in this game.

i don't understand the correct choices are actually very bad decisions to make

"Make the Right Choice"? So trusting the creepy guy who claims he's your uncle it the "right choice"? GREAT MORAL! And I got smothered by my "overly comfortable bed". WHAT.

Ha Briar.

So kids, the moral of the story is, always trust the creepy stranger in the big white van! :p

Wtf, man? You make the main character NINE, and one of the endings is "You get into the wrong crowd and die of an overdose."? How the hell are nine year olds getting into that kind of crap? And what are -you- on?

Some pages actually had periods on them, some didn't. At least try to be consistant.

random deaths all over the place, the maturity level needs to be at least 5, preferably higher, and there is absolutely no plot whatsoever.

Not really a good story. This seems made by a 7-year-old-

Look, you guys know what the fuck I'm talking about right?

Can you fix your grammar?

How on earth does this have a low maturity rating? Since when is the rape and murder of a little girl appropriate for all ages? Even apart from that, this is just a very very very bad game ;)

A maturity rating of 2 and you graphically describe the murder of a little girl? This is a true piece of shit. Try harder next time. 1/8. Would do -1/8 if possible.

no naked girls? then it's useless

I seem to be the most unlucky kid in the world.
Also some parts didn't make any sense

really long and pretty good, you need a name though

The choices were too random. I also don't like the fact that you made the maturity rating for this a 2 and yet you graphically described the death of a little girl.

I think you should stick to reading other people's stories.

Really random and not in a good way.

When I did make the right choices, like with the man in the van and I run to the police, I get killed? That's not a good message to kids, or for that matter anyone, and I think you need to do this game over. Also, try to break up paragraphs and sentences more because I don't really want to read giant walls of text.

2/8

Uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...that was...interesting...I think.
Very improbable. A little bit of randomness is OK, but unless you're trying to write a horror story, this could be a lot better. And I don't think this belongs in "School-based." And having your throat slit doesn't really belong in a maturity level of 2.