estelwen, The Wordsmith

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Here are a few facts about me by way of introduction.  I test INTP in the MBTI personality type system.There is very little you can do to annoy me if you're not intending to do so, and I am willing to proofread/review and offer suggestions. I don't know much about the Advanced Editor program, but can help with the writing aspect.

That being said I am a lover of original ideas, complex systems and reflection thereon. I love good books because they allow us to project ourselves into the story, in doing so, we gain insight into ourselves. The storygame format fascinates me because the reader's involvement with the story becomes so much more immediate and real. I'm a deep thinker and a psych minor in college (fine arts major). I have interests in Art, Philosophy, Psychology, Logic, Rhetoric, Literature and Creative writing.

I do not claim to be a professional writer, a dedicated writer, or even a good writer. My goal in joining this site is to improve. Whatever specific, and intelligent instructive criticism you may have to offer is welcome. I promise to accept it, think on it, and apply it. (note: the word intelligent is in bold for a reason). Stupid criticism like "this sucks," and "u r a bad riter" will be ingnored and or mocked.

I am working on two story games as much as my rather busy schedule allows. As far as I've seen, I seem to have some ideas which are original to this site, and I look forward to your feedback on my writing style, and concepts. 



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Atheism on 6/7/2012 12:26:11 PM

I don't know which verses you are thinking of in regards to killing adulturous women, but the story in John chapter 8 comes to mind. People were trying to stone a woman found in adultury, and Jesus forgives the woman, then challenges the stone throwers "If any is without sin, let him be the first to throw a stone". None of them did.

Atheism on 6/7/2012 11:25:16 AM

Context, Bo, context. You're taking one verse out of context, and missing the point of the passage

     13 Submit yourselves for the Lord’s sake to every human authority: whether to the emperor, as the supreme authority, 14 or to governors, who are sent by him to punish those who do wrong and to commend those who do right. 15 For it is God’s will that by doing good you should silence the ignorant talk of foolish people. 16 Live as free people, but do not use your freedom as a cover-up for evil; live as God’s slaves. 17 Show proper respect to everyone, love the family of believers, fear God, honor the emperor.

     18 Slaves, in reverent fear of God submit yourselves to your masters, not only to those who are good and considerate, but also to those who are harsh. 19 For it is commendable if someone bears up under the pain of unjust suffering because they are conscious of God. 20 But how is it to your credit if you receive a beating for doing wrong and endure it? But if you suffer for doing good and you endure it, this is commendable before God. 21 To this you were called, because Christ suffered for you, leaving you an example, that you should follow in his steps.

This isn't the Bible condoning slavery, merely accepting that it exists in the world of that day, and outlining how a slave should go about living a Godly life. The passage as a whole is about submitting to authority, and it uses slaves as one instance of that.

God did disaprove of Solomon's many wives and his concubines. Because of them, Solomon fell away from God to worship the Gods of his wives

Story game teasers on 6/6/2012 11:54:28 PM

Ashes to Ashes- Fantasy

You play as an extremely powerful young man just beginning training at an academy for magic. You soon learn however, that your power is more of a curse than a gift, and more dangerous than useful. Different factions would use you as a weapon in politics and war. Can you master your power, or will it destroy you and everyone around you? Can you navigate the treacherous powers vying to control you, or break free altogether, or will you become a mere chess piece, unable to decide your own destiny?

This game has around 50 pages completed, but will require far more attention before being completed

Scars of War-(a little more difficult to categorize, fantasy or love and dating with a psychological twist)

You play as Lyria, the 21 year old wife of a recently freed prisoner of war, and mother of his 5 year old son.  After believing him dead for three years, Lyria is overjoyed to hear that her husband is alive. Although physically uninjured, all is not well. His shattered and deluded mind proves a danger to those around him. Can Lyria help him find freedom and healing from the horrors of his past and his fears for the future, or will his mental instability turn to violent insanity?

This game is still mostly concept. I only have a few pages written. I have an idea block on the other one right now, so I’m using this one to keep writing until inspiration strikes

Feel free to  critique or ask questions.

Mass PMs on 6/6/2012 1:25:03 PM

perhaps only people with over a certain amount of points could use it. I know this has it's own set of potential problems, but it would eliminate some of the trolls at least. Or make it possible to ban people from using it, like the forums.

Debate. on 5/13/2012 1:06:03 PM

I'd be interested in giving it a try.

My dear Smogbrush on 5/12/2012 10:43:01 PM

I suppose you're right. Looks like whatever story they're trying to tell happens to have its inspiration in The Screwtape Letters. I just think they should have said so in the first instance.


An Origin of Magic Myth for my Storygame on 5/12/2012 10:40:44 PM

The first senario would be an extremely large undertaking, perhaps at some point. Right now, the player will play the part of a single protagonist, centuries after this takes place, so there are no distinct houses any more. This actually doesn't have much to do with the story itself, but it's an explanation of where the different powers come from, and it was fun to write.

My dear Smogbrush on 5/12/2012 3:43:05 PM

Yes, I read the book not too long ago and enjoyed it. I "popped the balloon" as you put it, because plagarism annoys me. I don't know what the writer is thinking, first posting plagarized stuff, and then posting again after they were called on it..... It's just baffling.

My dear Smogbrush on 5/12/2012 3:29:06 PM

Bo, I've seen enough of your writing to know you're pretty smart, so I didn't think you did think it was Lewis' writing. All I said was that it was partly original, put together with sentences from Lewis, then added on to and re-written at points, and that the re-written points were obvious.

An Origin of Magic Myth for my Storygame on 5/12/2012 3:16:10 PM

If the Enemy didn't have the same or similar powers, that would be handing an unfair advantage to the good guys, and no one likes that. And yes, the powers are very rare by the time the story takes place, and are distrusted by the majority of the population.