This is a "Song of Ice and Fire" fan fiction game. You are Jyana Mooton, and this is the story of your experiences at the tourney of Harrenhal 17 years before the events of "A Game of Thrones".

There's a forum thread about the game here: http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/writing-workshop/message/12978

This is my first game and English is my second language, so I'd appreciate any help and feedback I get.
It's a Harry Potter fanfic (as you can probably guess from the title). You play as a new student at hogwarts between Voldemorts defeat and the time the trio's kids attend school.

So far I've only made the part before you actually go to Hogwarts, but I'd really like to know what people have to say about it, so I'm puplishing it anyways.

I got some great feedback from puplishing the demo, but I'm back to working on it. Once I've finished the first year and corrected some of the stuff you guys didn't like I'll re-puplish it for a while.

If you have something big enough to give an idea of what the finished product will be you can publish it for a while and get feedback, then unpublish and continue/correct based on feedback. Releasing it in part is generally frowned upon as it severely limits the effect early choices can have on the later story, unless you make some code people have to enter at the beginning of the next part, which sets the variables and items as they were at the end of the last. And I doubt most people will bother with that.

Alternatively you could post the first page in the writing workshop and get feedback that way, if you think it can accurately reflect the direction of the story.

The main character of The Thick of It, played by Capaldi.

http://graphtv.kevinformatics.com/tt0436992 has the imdb ratings for all the episodes, which can give a general idea of which are most popular. But Doctor Who is one of those shows where people watch it for very different reasons, so someone watching it as a drama might love "The Girl in the Fireplace" while someone watching it as a comedy might prefer "The Eleventh Hour" or a horror fan would like "Midnight". Most people seem to like "Blink" from what I understand. And that's without going into classic Who.

My mum read them to me when I was a kid, but it's been a while. I think I mostly liked the ones where people got their heads cut off.

You're moving to Denmark? Velkommen :)

It would be hard to do a nonlinear story if the ending is fixed, but one way to do it would to make the player be different characters in the scene depending on their choices, e.g. one ending has you as the murderer, another as the victim and another as a witness. 

Of course you could simply have many ways of reaching a similar point, giving the event different context and motivation for the player, e.g. you slay the dragon because it killed your family, to rescue someone it holds captive or to get the bounty on it.

In my experience a lot of "new" atheists in particular tend to come across as condecending, in an "oh, you believe in god? Yeah, I used to do that but now I'm much wiser and better than you" sort of way ( see here and  Ricky Gervais). I don't know whether you do that, but it might be the problem.

They're not particularly long by fantasy standards. I don't think the first two are more than 300 pages. 

Is it not changing the link at all?

I just tested $LINKTEXT1 in one of my stories so it seems like it must be something with the variables.

Put it in pagescript and use $LINKTEXT1 instead of $LINKTEXT01.