Player Comments on My Apocalypse: On The Road Again (First Entry)

Not bad for a first shot at story games. You used items well and you had a decent plot. Thankfully, I could use the items in more than one place as well, which is good. On the other hand, the narrating was a little weird(I was confused on who was talking half the time.), and you really didn't describe things as well as you could have.

I would suggest adding pictures, more descriptions(Of people, places, things, etc.), and just a little bit more clearer narrating.

4/8

— JMgskills on 9/22/2012 2:44:42 PM with a score of 0

i love it

— alex on 1/4/2024 12:56:39 PM with a score of 0

Great stories,But what happened next

— Mirakelor on 8/26/2023 3:42:58 AM with a score of 0

Short and sweet with a few minor spelling errors. Overall, great adventure!

— MessyGoat on 12/30/2022 2:32:36 AM with a score of 0

I still find it terribly unrealistic that any college student has a first aid kit. A gun, I may believe, a knife perhaps too.
Oh well, I died during the gunfight.

— Darius_Conwright on 1/22/2022 6:10:33 PM with a score of 0

Too brief. More choices, please.

— Quorrah on 9/15/2018 4:23:16 PM with a score of 0

Okay. This game put me in a loop the first time I played it. Use your First Aid Kit or Knife, you get a message about your conscience which forces you to go back. Use your gun? You...technically win, I think, but there's NO end link and you're eventually taken back to the conscience page which then loops back to the page with the gun. I was so confused and ended up restarting to take another route.

— Saika on 3/22/2017 6:17:05 AM with a score of 0

Pretty good! If it was it bit longer it would be 10 times better

— ZombieGamer9188 on 2/14/2017 4:05:45 PM with a score of 0

Cool story

— Voltage on 11/27/2016 11:50:44 PM with a score of 0

Funny

— Pugtaco on 8/26/2016 3:05:42 PM with a score of 0

loved it

— gpitard on 12/16/2015 8:33:41 AM with a score of 0

that was tiiiiiiiiight!

— reaper127 on 8/21/2015 5:25:39 AM with a score of 0

Very enjoyable, dramatic writing and interesting characters :) I hope to read more

— Will11 on 1/27/2015 3:22:31 AM with a score of 0

A great little story. Fun and the choices make sense. Good grammar and a high standard of writing.

— insanebutvain on 9/3/2014 12:30:19 AM with a score of 0

Fun but not nearly long enough.

— RowanTiva on 7/20/2014 6:31:34 PM with a score of 0

It was pretty good, made me laugh a bit. I had a glitch, though, where my first aid kit disappeared and I couldn't drift into death because my conscience was yelling at me. But otherwise this was an interesting and fun game.

— TheSophia on 7/16/2014 11:37:55 PM with a score of 0

MAKE THE NEXT ONE!!!!

— bookworm803 on 2/14/2014 5:31:40 PM with a score of 0

Fun game.

— walker on 1/8/2014 10:46:44 PM with a score of 0

That was pretty enjoyable, actually. Not to mention your first game was advanced. This is a first game to be proud of, sir.

— ISentinelPenguinI on 6/2/2013 5:56:22 PM with a score of 0

I enjoyed it.

— sapper0 on 5/29/2013 10:45:50 PM with a score of 0

Its really good

— Chaze on 4/7/2013 5:35:52 PM with a score of 0

I cant say exactly why but I really enjoyed playing this. The writing was good as were some of the descriptions and use of items.

— FeanorOnForge on 4/5/2013 1:42:01 PM with a score of 0

Quite short, but good so eagerly waint for the next part

— smithysmithson on 3/18/2013 6:02:32 PM with a score of 0

pretty fun

— EragonMax490 on 3/7/2013 11:30:58 AM with a score of 0

it wass great

— priryan123 on 1/26/2013 4:26:09 AM with a score of 0

Cant wait for the next part, very good for your first game.

— CovElite on 10/20/2012 5:33:52 PM with a score of 0

Hi Co.

— 78 on 10/10/2012 1:53:29 PM with a score of 0

It has potential, its linear as hell though, but then that can be forgiven with series... 5

— Zane on 10/4/2012 9:56:39 PM with a score of 0

It's okay. Needs to be a bit longer.

— ColdLight on 9/30/2012 8:31:36 AM with a score of 0

Great for a first story can't wait for the second!

— haledakota on 9/28/2012 4:10:34 PM with a score of 0

Not bad, rather well written, could be longer though

— Xt1000305 on 9/25/2012 5:37:54 AM with a score of 0

Ok

— betaband on 9/24/2012 2:47:52 PM with a score of 0

Pretty awesome for your first story

— jasperranz on 9/24/2012 8:32:15 AM with a score of 0

I have to say I liked it. It had a Zombieland spin to it in a good way :).
All I can say is I hope you build on this story!

— simplesabley on 9/23/2012 8:15:06 PM with a score of 0

Who knew life in an apocalypse would be so random?

— Swiftstryker on 9/23/2012 2:06:12 PM with a score of 0

Not bad at all. Quite entertaining, but way too short - write more! =)

— BerkaZerka on 9/22/2012 11:06:32 PM with a score of 0

great!

— rbf22 on 9/22/2012 10:36:29 PM with a score of 0

extremely good for a first try (even better than mine XD)

— alienalpha on 9/22/2012 6:10:05 PM with a score of 0