Player Comments on The Midnight Monster

Quite a few spelling mistakes. It's spelled 'through' not 'threw,' because 'through' is for 'going through' something and 'threw' is the past tense of 'throw' as in 'I threw it away.' >_> Which is what you should've done with the script for this story. It's... poorly written and not remotely creative in my opinion.

It's bad, but not to the degree where it's actually funny to me. It's sick, but not in a way that's amusing. It's short and has a small word count, which may be the only saving grace for most bad writing, but that also reassure me that, yes, you really didn't put any actual effort into this. Knowing that decreases my respect considerably. I do agree with you, though, there is nothing special about it and it makes no sense.

"Sadly you had aids and gave them to 36 people when your blood splattered everywhere ... Dick." Wtf? Is that suppose to be funny? I'm not a prude and gore's fine, but that was just sort of tasteless. The "you're raped 'til you die because you bought porn" or "you're raped stupid and die retarded" endings aren't much better.

— Kiel_Farren on 4/7/2014 1:33:01 AM with a score of 0

Um, what?

More to the story, please. :)

— Quorrah on 9/18/2018 5:35:05 PM with a score of 0

I want a better choose your own adventure author and a damn cookie.

— Me. on 6/22/2018 10:49:29 PM with a score of 0

I went to the porn shop LOL best day o' my life

— pebble on 12/3/2017 1:10:46 PM with a score of 0

Lol that was really random. Those spelling mistakes though... :/

— crazygurl on 6/27/2017 5:34:43 PM with a score of 0

Really. I kill someone and then die because I drown on their blood. >:( This game also has some spelling mistakes like "wate" instead of "wait". But the game needs work. It might be random but seriously? A rapist clown appearing behind you because you lock a door, instead of letting someone in, when the person has no relation to a rapist clown!
/endshortrant

— WizzyCat on 2/12/2017 9:01:10 PM with a score of 0

I tried again and lost because the only thing I could do was pee my pants. Which made me lose. ?

— Morganis on 9/5/2016 8:16:26 PM with a score of 0

Um...Not PG, there aren't Nazis in London, but I want to try again.

— Morgans on 9/5/2016 8:14:46 PM with a score of 0

3/8
Just because at least there were a lot of choices.

— Seto on 6/16/2016 1:06:01 AM with a score of 0

Well that was, eventful. At least.

— ponistiti on 4/7/2016 1:30:28 PM with a score of 0

What did I just play?

— CatLover366 on 1/18/2016 7:24:43 PM with a score of 0

1/8
Why?-Errors, bad endings, the fact that you spelled Heaven wrong, the fact that if you go by the bible those who commit suicide, unless it is in place of another, are damned to hell while you give us a choice, there are more reasons but I don't feel like typing them.

— DeathIncarnate on 8/31/2015 6:44:32 PM with a score of 0

Nazis in London, I don't think so. :(

— Dmanxbox on 4/29/2015 9:26:05 AM with a score of 0

I turned into a werewolf. Can't leave Jack!

— Wolfina on 4/27/2015 1:13:02 PM with a score of 0

That was... interesting... thought it would be more in-depth, and a lot more detail, like an actual story. I like those.

— Psychotikitty on 4/15/2013 5:46:38 PM with a score of 0

Seth says MEH! Kinda weird....

— SethIsBeast on 10/29/2012 10:06:02 PM with a score of 0

this story is perfect and plesantly random!

— Nicpinkygirl on 6/20/2012 5:14:07 PM with a score of 0

XD!!!!! very humorous, nice little tale alotta the endings made me laugh, i liked it. ^_^ Not much plot but this story didn't need plot, it was brilliant in its own way. Congratz!

— ChaiHai on 9/28/2011 5:56:17 AM with a score of 0

like no plot every pages u die, i did London

— DarkentityOni on 9/7/2011 9:31:06 PM with a score of 0

CONGRADULATIONS!!! u are correct. the idea was from An American Werewolf in London. You get a cookie!

— Moony_Ramos on 8/5/2011 2:00:07 AM with a score of 0

Wacky shenanigans are great. If only there were more than two lines on each page! And I'm thinking you got the idea from the American Werewolf movies.

— Loon on 7/10/2011 4:37:29 PM with a score of 0

The deaths in this story were freakin' hilarious.

— deadly_sinner66 on 5/24/2011 10:57:09 PM with a score of 0

pretty good.

— Killer999 on 5/20/2011 12:13:39 PM with a score of 0

There were actually some pretty funny parts.

— JJJ-thebanisher on 5/6/2011 5:59:58 PM with a score of 0

Crazy endings.

— kalun on 5/5/2011 10:50:46 PM with a score of 0

uhhhhh.... that was um... good?

— GhostMan on 5/3/2011 1:32:39 AM with a score of 0

I agree, it made no sense but it was amusing.

— Killa_Robot on 5/2/2011 4:58:48 PM with a score of 0

At first I wondered how you got a story up so soon after you started,but then I saw the story. All kidding aside, I like the attempts at humor and a few of them made me chuckle. I guess I just like more "meaty" stories. Seriously though, congrats on figuring out the editor and posting a story so quickly.