Player Comments on The Paper

Not the best, certainly not the worst!

Wow, this story was surprisingly good. A little crazy at times, but very great. I liked how there was a picture that had to do with the story on every page, and the grammar was great as well.

If I could leave some crtiscism, it would be about the randomness of the options. At some points it just gives you a list of three - four options and you have to pick the best one. At these points you're just clicking random links, trying to get to the end. Not so refreshing.

But it was a great, short story!

6/8

I got mah paper

It was funny, and surprisingly I liked it more than I thought I would. However, I'd rather have choices of what to do than stuff like "Choice 1" and "Choice 2."

Wow. Now that was zany. It reminded me of the old CYOA stories - as in, the ones where you choose one harmless option and BAM time travelling aliens and shit, I mean it was like the game was on drugs or something. I could not predict how this was going to go.

It is not without its flaws, however. At one point you present us with 4 doors and most of them have bloody zoo animals behind them, I mean what the hell man. And the continuity? So the guy I sat next to on the subway happened to be a scientist in a lab? How did the virus get onto my laptop in the first place?

There's also a page where the reader is given three options, but they're not told what the options actually are. I get the feeling that you forgot to include it or something - especially since the next page has the same kind of thing, and the options are shown clearly this time.

I liked it and it was a pretty crazy ride. The writing style was pretty cool as well. It could just use a bit more depth. I don't even know what planet these aliens came from or anything about them. It's random, yes, and that's part of its charm, but the plot needs some kind of backbone to extend itself further.

Utterly unrealistic and random plot that jumps from subject to subject. Also completely linear. It did entertain me for a bit, so... 2/8.

Eh, a good concept and good potential, but it was like LUCK LUCK LUCK!!!! It really seemed nothing else mattered, and their wasn't much of a backstory so I rate it about a 4

It's good.

"Hurled into a beam of cosmic rays, the four of you are."
-Probably Yoda.

Crazy story, at least it kept me entertained

Don't just have the readers clicking random links with no rhyme or reason. At least give us some logical indications as to which choice is the best, and give more endings to the story.

Unexpected descriptive narrative in the middle of the story. if you want to experience a genre mash up, this is your story. but i really think that this story can be improved. give logical description the choices. what can differs you when you choose door 1 from door 2? instead of writing it as door 1 or door 2, write it as the metal door at the corner of the room and the glass door within your grasp. that way, the choices will have visible logical consequences before the player even choose.

I think I died... a lot.